Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Universities should give the same amount of money to their students’ sports activities as they give to their university libraries.

Everyone enjoys sports when they are free. By sports we can relax and train our bodies. However, many people might think sports are not important activities, I do agree that sports are valuable and should be treated significantly. The following passages will illustrate the reasons I hold.
First of all, people do exercise to strengthen or relax bodies. If we do not train our bodies, we will feel weak and easy to get hurt. Besides, exercising also increase our willpower. In other words, doing exercising makes our bodies and mind heathier. For example, when I was a student in Taiwan, I had a roommate, John. His hobbies were jogging, heavy training and soccer. Every day when I met him, he was always happy and vigorous. Furthermore, after he worked out, I could see that he had more energy to do more things such as studying. What is more, he was always looking on the bright sight. Sometimes John suggested me that if I felt worried about something, I could do exercise. Following his advice, I went to jogging before I was going to present at our lab meeting. I found that I felt calm and started to believe I could do it well. Consequently, my performance was excellent. This example tells us that sports are as important as any other activity.
Secondly, despite the fact that sports are merely parts of our lives, there are still many athletes whose jobs are sports. We can see a lot of athletes are shining on the national stages. Not only is playing basketball their hobby, but also they earn money by means of sports. That is to say, sports are another way to develop career. I made a friend, Tom, when I was traveling in Japan. He liked to play basketball. When I was staying in Japan, he usually invited me to play basketball with him. Few years later after I left Japan, I saw a sport news about a team won a basketball game on the international stage. I recognized that one of these superstars was Tom. From the story we know that sports are another good way to step our career forward.
In conclusion, sports are important as other academic activities because they are good to our bodies and whole lives.

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Line 3, column 540, Rule ID: A_UNCOUNTABLE[3]
Message: Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply 'sport news'.
Suggestion: sport news
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, consequently, first, furthermore, however, if, look, second, secondly, so, still, then, well, as to, for example, in conclusion, such as, first of all, in other words, what is more, that is to say

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 25.0 15.1003584229 166% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 62.0 43.0788530466 144% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 36.0 52.1666666667 69% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 8.0752688172 12% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1749.0 1977.66487455 88% => OK
No of words: 380.0 407.700716846 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.60263157895 4.8611393121 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.41515443553 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.56723845725 2.67179642975 96% => OK
Unique words: 217.0 212.727598566 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.571052631579 0.524837075471 109% => OK
syllable_count: 543.6 618.680645161 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 19.0 9.59856630824 198% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 29.0 20.6003584229 141% => OK
Sentence length: 13.0 20.1344086022 65% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 26.8350313222 48.9658058833 55% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 60.3103448276 100.406767564 60% => OK
Words per sentence: 13.1034482759 20.6045352989 64% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.44827586207 5.45110844103 137% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 18.0 11.8709677419 152% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.88709677419 184% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.129411003028 0.236089414692 55% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0317552964879 0.076458572812 42% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.034191531054 0.0737576698707 46% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0919461748823 0.150856017488 61% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0334999498846 0.0645574589148 52% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 6.8 11.7677419355 58% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 75.2 58.1214874552 129% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.0 10.1575268817 59% => Flesch kincaid grade is low.
coleman_liau_index: 8.51 10.9000537634 78% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.52 8.01818996416 94% => OK
difficult_words: 78.0 86.8835125448 90% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 5.0 10.002688172 50% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 7.2 10.0537634409 72% => OK
text_standard: 7.0 10.247311828 68% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?

Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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