Do you agree or disagree with the following statement: young people do not give enough time for helping in their societies
By and large, it has been stablished without doubt that in such a sophisticated and competitive world, to achieve what you want is getting difficult and take more time especially for young people. Some people may hold the view that young people do not give enough time to helping their communities. However, some others look at this concept through a different lens. In my perspective, I firmly agree with the former concept. In the following paragraph, I will delve into the most outstanding reasons and examples.
The first exquisite point to be mentioned here is that with the progression in technologies and elevation in the sanitation levels, the populations in all around the world are increasing rapidly, and as a result the limitation in financial resources and competition for get a job and earn money especially for the youth are occurring, which make everything too complex. Consequently, the young people would rather study hard, and then they, as an adept person, finish their educations to gain an opportunity to get a proper job. All of mentioned points will take more time and even if a young girl or boy want to attend in social activity in his/her society, he/she will not have enough time and will be under terrible pressure by his/her tasks and duties. For example, when I was in third summer vacation in college, my mother got sick and I had to send some money for her, but i could not find a part time work after a 2- hour interview, because my education had not been finished and employer did not want an unqualified student.
Another significant point is that companies and employers after a tough and serious investigation of one's personal background, education and skills might admit a young person and might get a good salary; however, they will expect that their employees must be on time and work a lot. Therefore, young people to improve their income have to do their responsibilities as good as they can do. To illustrate, in Yale university a study conducted in young people, aged 25-35, had strong academic degrees, and these young people had been given a questionnaire and answered the questions. questions were about a time which allocate to the social activity like exercising, visiting family members, helping in charities etc. The results of study showed that less than 6 hours per month, they have spent to do these activities in the societies and most of these young people are working or studying, even some of them said that they have not enough time to do their task.
To wrap it up, all the aforementioned reasons lead us to the conclusion that nowadays the young people are under pressure to find a job and make money and then, they have not enough time to attend and help their societies, even if they are interested in such activities. It is highly recommended that governments and authorities, with establishing special group must pay attention more to this issue and find a solution for that because the invaluable assets of every society are their active young people.
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...estionnaire and answered the questions. questions were about a time which allocate to the...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, consequently, first, however, if, look, may, so, then, therefore, third, even so, for example, as a result, by and large
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 30.0 13.8261648746 217% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 51.0 43.0788530466 118% => OK
Preposition: 58.0 52.1666666667 111% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2508.0 1977.66487455 127% => OK
No of words: 516.0 407.700716846 127% => OK
Chars per words: 4.86046511628 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.76609204519 4.48103885553 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.7476547079 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Unique words: 267.0 212.727598566 126% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.517441860465 0.524837075471 99% => OK
syllable_count: 780.3 618.680645161 126% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 32.0 20.1344086022 159% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 87.629190342 48.9658058833 179% => OK
Chars per sentence: 156.75 100.406767564 156% => OK
Words per sentence: 32.25 20.6045352989 157% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.8125 5.45110844103 143% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.364235895268 0.236089414692 154% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.119454709881 0.076458572812 156% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.103953812802 0.0737576698707 141% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.229889026074 0.150856017488 152% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0776241774977 0.0645574589148 120% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.6 11.7677419355 150% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.46 58.1214874552 82% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.6 10.1575268817 144% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.5 10.9000537634 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.59 8.01818996416 107% => OK
difficult_words: 110.0 86.8835125448 127% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.8 10.0537634409 147% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.247311828 146% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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