Decisions made in today determines the tomorrow. Decision making is critical to the successful evolution of a society, country. Although some argue that almost all of the important decisions are made by older generation and have not influence of younger , I see a different view. In the subsequent paragraphs, I will elaborate on my viewpoint through two compelling reasons.
First of all, unarguably it is the youth that drives the economy of the country as they contribute to the largest part of the working force. Since economy is one key pillar on which future society is built upon, younger generation can definitely shape the future. For example, in my country, even with a developing economy, has given power to for economic policy making. The government has identified that these fresh minds generates out of the box solutions to decades old issues which caused the economy to stale. After young blood took control of the economic related authorities, they promoted entrepreneurship and technology based startup , consequently unemployment rate hit all time low and economy growth rate was second only to China.
Secondly, in any society celebrities are more influential than any politician. Peoples trust sport stars, singers, actors, actresses and usually try to follow their advises. Furthermore, celebrities also try to guide their fans through social media platform. Since most of these celebrities are from younger generation we have to agree that , they have the power to influence the society and their decision making to build a better tomorrow. For instance, recently Sri Lankan government started a highway project which was planned to run through a fragile eco-system; primary rain forest. At the start commons supported the development project, but then young sport stars and actors with the help of environmental specialists started a social media campaign to educate people on the adverse effects of the project and importance of the protection of the rain forest. This forced the government to change project so that road do not damage the forest.
In conclusion, I firmly believe that young citizens have primary role to play in decision making. As the main contributors to the economy and celebrities who can influence many, the younger generation should use this power or the betterment of the future society and should be an example for next generation.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, furthermore, if, second, secondly, so, then, for example, for instance, in conclusion, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 23.0 43.0788530466 53% => OK
Preposition: 51.0 52.1666666667 98% => OK
Nominalization: 18.0 8.0752688172 223% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2007.0 1977.66487455 101% => OK
No of words: 381.0 407.700716846 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.26771653543 4.8611393121 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.41805628031 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.84328135447 2.67179642975 106% => OK
Unique words: 220.0 212.727598566 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.577427821522 0.524837075471 110% => OK
syllable_count: 636.3 618.680645161 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 58.577162364 48.9658058833 120% => OK
Chars per sentence: 111.5 100.406767564 111% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.1666666667 20.6045352989 103% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.27777777778 5.45110844103 134% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.193933326931 0.236089414692 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0544549374935 0.076458572812 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0515223897179 0.0737576698707 70% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.114689841826 0.150856017488 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0440225789506 0.0645574589148 68% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.0 11.7677419355 119% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 41.7 58.1214874552 72% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 10.1575268817 125% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.29 10.9000537634 122% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.11 8.01818996416 114% => OK
difficult_words: 107.0 86.8835125448 123% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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