Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Educating children is a more difficult task today than it was in the past because they spend so much time on cell phone, online games, and social networking Web site.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Education has been on of the most crucial things that children need to be matured and prosperous in their own future. However, in this modern era with advance in technology and under their influence, it has been more important since technology can have either constructive or distractive aspects. Scholars have been searching about this issue for years and now a question arises regarding to this research is does technology act as impediment for educating children or not? As a matter of favt, I believe that it could be both beneficial and harmful for the procces of learning. In waht follows, I will substantiate my double-side point of view.
First off, by emergence of more innovative tools for improving life quality, people become more comfortable than past decades. For one thing, they are more likely to find relevent information through thses media specially web sites. For example, as the new lobtops have been invented, it became easier for teacher managements to alter their method of teaching from traditional method to online systems. If they do this new system, students will learnd more and become more productive.
On the other hand, it goes without saying that these tools are so harmful not only for their progress but also for their health. Most students are addicted toonline games which make them nervous and stressful. This leads them to lose concentration on the material they are supposed to learn. As a pyschological survey conducted in some of schools in my country shows, these days almost all children get accustomed to social networking Web sites and the most surprising result from this research indicates that the more the time they spend, the less they can focus on lessons. For example, my younger brother was so clever in elementary school when there was not so many distractive things. However,the time he enterned to highschool coincided to the time that lots of online games had been arrived and all students in his age got stock with these games.
To put it briefly, contemplating both sides, one soon realizes that technology have both helpfu and harmful facet that every individual should be aware of them so they are able use them in proper way. I recommend students that they be in constactive side and not use focus on negative aspects of technology.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 20, Rule ID: ON_OF_THE[1]
Message: Did you mean 'one'?
Suggestion: one
Education has been on of the most crucial things that childre...
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Line 5, column 332, Rule ID: MOST_SOME_OF_NNS[1]
Message: After 'some of', you should use 'the' ('some of the schools') or simply say ''some schools''.
Suggestion: some of the schools; some schools
... As a pyschological survey conducted in some of schools in my country shows, these days almost ...
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Line 5, column 698, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , the
... not so many distractive things. However,the time he enterned to highschool coincide...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, briefly, but, first, however, if, regarding, so, for example, for one thing, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 46.0 43.0788530466 107% => OK
Preposition: 49.0 52.1666666667 94% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1921.0 1977.66487455 97% => OK
No of words: 384.0 407.700716846 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.00260416667 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.4267276788 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.6598308686 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Unique words: 223.0 212.727598566 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.580729166667 0.524837075471 111% => OK
syllable_count: 594.0 618.680645161 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 53.597500329 48.9658058833 109% => OK
Chars per sentence: 113.0 100.406767564 113% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.5882352941 20.6045352989 110% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.88235294118 5.45110844103 108% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.170952360306 0.236089414692 72% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0511250613696 0.076458572812 67% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.044466267149 0.0737576698707 60% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0953399694751 0.150856017488 63% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0535495347729 0.0645574589148 83% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.4 11.7677419355 114% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 58.1214874552 99% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.02 10.9000537634 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.59 8.01818996416 107% => OK
difficult_words: 94.0 86.8835125448 108% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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