Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
It is not fair that some athletes earn more money than some others.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Nowadays, there are several tournaments in every sport and also the variety of sport’s fields are increase compare to the past years. Some competitions are international, and some of them are national. In every sport’s areas, there are athletes. Some athletes earn a tremendous amount of money regard to some others. I agree with the statement. I will explain in the following.
First, one of the critical factors that the athletes enhance their quality is motivation. It is crucial for someone want to succeed there are motivations to work hard to reach his or her goal. One of the motives is a sum of money that athletes earn. If an athlete sees that the other athlete earn more wage, his motivation for practicing decreased. However, it is not valid for all athletes and it cause increase motivation.
Second, In my opinion, the money which given to athletes shows a sign of respect to him or her. So, by giving a different amount of money to athletes convey the message that athletes have a different level of respect. But I think it is rudeness toward the athletes. In the world, an attitude of sports is its dignity, and by given different amount of money, this attitude is ignoring.
I conclusion, the money that some athletes earn more than others is not fair, It causes a reduction in motivation, and also it does not consider respect for the athletes and also contradicts with the fairness of sport.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: The pronoun 'someone' must be used with a third-person verb: 'wants'.
Suggestion: wants
...s motivation. It is crucial for someone want to succeed there are motivations to wor...
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Line 4, column 399, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'causes'?
Suggestion: causes
...it is not valid for all athletes and it cause increase motivation. Second, In my o...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, second, so, i think, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 9.8082437276 10% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.0286738351 54% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 25.0 43.0788530466 58% => OK
Preposition: 32.0 52.1666666667 61% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1186.0 1977.66487455 60% => More number of characters wanted.
No of words: 245.0 407.700716846 60% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.84081632653 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.95632099841 4.48103885553 88% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.74459371654 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Unique words: 127.0 212.727598566 60% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.518367346939 0.524837075471 99% => OK
syllable_count: 382.5 618.680645161 62% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 15.0 20.1344086022 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 45.9809318495 48.9658058833 94% => OK
Chars per sentence: 74.125 100.406767564 74% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.3125 20.6045352989 74% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.0625 5.45110844103 75% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.273965354995 0.236089414692 116% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0960518055611 0.076458572812 126% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.10571447143 0.0737576698707 143% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.1752650638 0.150856017488 116% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0805649503389 0.0645574589148 125% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.0 11.7677419355 76% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 56.25 58.1214874552 97% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.2 10.9000537634 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.54 8.01818996416 94% => OK
difficult_words: 49.0 86.8835125448 56% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 5.0 10.002688172 50% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.0537634409 80% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Minimum 250 words wanted.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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