Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
One of the best ways that parents can help their teenage children prepare for adult life is to encourage them to take a part-time job.
Throughout history, job has played a prominent role in all societies. Due to it is paramount importance the young people learn how to work. A controversial question Which is often raised this idea about the teenagers' work. Some people may hold the view that the fathers and mothers must promote their children to learn some special ability when they are young. However, some other people may take an opposite viewpoint that the young people do not need to do the part-time jobs, and the parents must proper suitable life for their children. I personally assert that the parents ought to cheer their youth to learning and doing the part-time jobs; therefore, I agree with this proposal. In the following paragraph, I will delve into the outstanding reasons.
The first exquisite factor to be mentioned is that in the modern era a teenager must have the ability to do the special skill, for they will succeed in the future. To elaborate on my point, since the parents have broad horizon about the future, they should promote the offspring to do part-time jobs. Also, owing to living in the modern era, the teenager can be the success if they have special skills which the other people do not have information about them. Considering computer skill for instance. As we live in the modern era, technology improves with the high speed. If the juveniles learn some skill about computers such as software maintenance, hardware maintenance, and many other abilities, they can promote in the future and earn money.
In addition, the fathers and mothers must provoke the young kids to the learning ability that be able to earn money. In other words, the children only live with their parents until they will become 18-year-old. Hence, the offspring need become dependent persons. If they learn some duty, they can not only earn money but also can start dependent life. Also, in this day, the cost of living is high so that people need more than one jobs; therefore, they can do part-time jobs which they had been learning in the past. A significant example that strikes in my mind is about my own experience. When I was a child, I took part-time jobs. I learned some skill like pipeline designer, computer designer and many other circumstances. Thus, I have a beneficial career, and besides this career, I do the part-time job as a computer designer.
To wrap it up, all the aforementioned reasons lead us to the conclusion that the parents must make provoke in their teenager to do the part-time jobs. I believe that the teenager must learn part-time jobs because it does not only help them to earn money but also helps the young people become the successful person
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- TPO 43 70
- TOEFL T P O 34 - Integrated Writing Task 78
- TPO 33 80
- Many filmmakers make movies based on books. When a movie is produced based on books, some people prefer to read books before watching films, other people choose to watch the movie first. Which one do you think is better? Why? 60
- In order to stay healthy, many people choose to exercise. Some people tend to exercise individually such as running and riding bicycles, etc. Some people tend to participate in group exercises such as team sports. Which one do you prefer and why? 70
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, first, hence, however, if, may, so, therefore, thus, for instance, in addition, such as, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 21.0 9.8082437276 214% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 47.0 43.0788530466 109% => OK
Preposition: 50.0 52.1666666667 96% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2215.0 1977.66487455 112% => OK
No of words: 457.0 407.700716846 112% => OK
Chars per words: 4.84682713348 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.62358717085 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.52560398764 2.67179642975 95% => OK
Unique words: 207.0 212.727598566 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.45295404814 0.524837075471 86% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 677.7 618.680645161 110% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 8.0 3.08781362007 259% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 10.0 4.94265232975 202% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6003584229 117% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.2228416344 48.9658058833 90% => OK
Chars per sentence: 92.2916666667 100.406767564 92% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.0416666667 20.6045352989 92% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.125 5.45110844103 94% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.259257924843 0.236089414692 110% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0751677936914 0.076458572812 98% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0652324318593 0.0737576698707 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.182038391689 0.150856017488 121% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0449311351069 0.0645574589148 70% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.9 11.7677419355 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 58.1214874552 104% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.85 10.9000537634 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.31 8.01818996416 91% => OK
difficult_words: 79.0 86.8835125448 91% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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