Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?One of the best ways that parents can help their teenage children prepare for adult life is to encourage them to take a part-time job.Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

lots of parents prefer to help thier teenage child by evoking them to have a temprory job. I blieve that it is important iusse for parents and i agree with taking a pat -time job by tenagers. Having a job for tenagers can have lot of avanteges and disadvanteges. In this reading i'm going to say about four aspects of having a part- time job.

first of all in my mind teenagers like to be independent and earn money by themselves. througt working teenagers can understand the price value of money. for example if a girl buys a lot of sweet or clothes for her self now she knows how hard is it to earn money so she will spend her money in better way. Another aspect of this issue is independency of teenagers. One of the most important things that parents must learn to their children is that how to be independent and the first step of it is to having a job.

secondly in my mind by having a job teenagers can learn to be responsible. Some parents are so anxious about this due to worrieness about children future. for instant a boy that didn't care about any thing like being on time by having a job learn to be on time and know how responsibility is important.

additionally l think that parents want the best for their childern. Teenagers can learn skill by taking a part -time job so it can have lots of benefits for their future and help them to find a better job when they become adult. for example a teenager can learn how to cook or work with computer and learn some softwares.

finally i beileve that it is nesseary to teenagers be preapared mentaly. by having a job they can konw how a job situation is and how should she or he behave. Parents have an essential role to help their children to undrestanting them the differents between school and for example a company.

In conclution parents can convey a lot of profits to their teenage childerns by encourageing them to take a temporary job.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
finally, first, if, second, secondly, so, for example, first of all

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 37.0 43.0788530466 86% => OK
Preposition: 54.0 52.1666666667 104% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.0752688172 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1565.0 1977.66487455 79% => OK
No of words: 353.0 407.700716846 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.43342776204 4.8611393121 91% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.33454660006 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.59678667697 2.67179642975 97% => OK
Unique words: 163.0 212.727598566 77% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.461756373938 0.524837075471 88% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 485.1 618.680645161 78% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 9.59856630824 10% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.51792114695 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 32.506807299 48.9658058833 66% => OK
Chars per sentence: 82.3684210526 100.406767564 82% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.5789473684 20.6045352989 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.52631578947 5.45110844103 65% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.53405017921 132% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 17.0 5.5376344086 307% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.316462030737 0.236089414692 134% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.112145672661 0.076458572812 147% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0729879723382 0.0737576698707 99% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.197389169593 0.150856017488 131% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0693406134145 0.0645574589148 107% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.7 11.7677419355 74% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 70.13 58.1214874552 121% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.9 10.1575268817 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.41 10.9000537634 77% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.99 8.01818996416 87% => OK
difficult_words: 55.0 86.8835125448 63% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.002688172 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 7.0 10.247311828 68% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?

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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200

Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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