Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
People learn things better from those at their own level—such as fellow
students or co-workers—than from those at a higher level, such as teachers or
supervisors.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer
It is almost agreed that people learn from different sources such as school, books, their experiences and people around them. Personally, I believe that it more valuable to learn from people above us than learn from our peers. I feel this way for several reasons which I will explore in the following essay.
First of all, people at higher stages have more experience from our peers. While it is true that sometimes our classmates or colleagues could help us to learn a specific information, but they do not have the enough experience to relate or connect this small information or details to wider image. My experience is a compelling example of this. When I was in college, I was doing my major in sociology, and I had difficulty in understanding some economical concepts. Consequently, I went to one my friends who is majoring in economics to explain these concepts to me. And he did a good job doing that, but he was not able to explain these terms through sociological perspective, so I was not able to understand these concepts in my major context. On the other hand, when I went to a professor who specializes in sociology of economics, he made me able to understand these concepts very well. Therefore, the experience our teachers have, and the time they spent gaining knowledge make them better source to learn from than our peers.
Moreover, our teachers and managers have the required tools to deliver the knowledge they have. It is a part of their responsibility to teach others. In contrast, even if our peer have the knowledge or the skills we need to obtain, the might have not the ability to deliver these knowledge or skills to us. For instance, three years ago, I started to learn programming, and a close friend of mine is good programmer, so I asked him to teach me the basics of programming, buy he was not very helpful to me. This happened not because he lacks the enough knowledge, but his limited tools to transform this knowledge to others. Eventually, I had to take a special course for beginners by an experienced trainee. So I learned the basics that I was looking for.
To conclude, I am of the opinion that we could learn better from our teachers and bosses than from our peers. This is because the experiences the acquired, and the tools they hold to deliver this experience.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 960, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...r teachers have, and the time they spent gaining knowledge make them better sourc...
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Line 9, column 275, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this knowledge' or 'these knowledges'?
Suggestion: this knowledge; these knowledges
...e might have not the ability to deliver these knowledge or skills to us. For instance, three ye...
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Line 9, column 358, Rule ID: AFFORD_VBG[1]
Message: This verb is used with infinitive: 'to program', 'to programme'.
Suggestion: to program; to programme
...ce, three years ago, I started to learn programming, and a close friend of mine is good pro...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... buy he was not very helpful to me. This happened not because he lacks the enough...
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Line 13, column 54, Rule ID: AFFORD_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the infinitive: 'to better', 'to well'
Suggestion: to better; to well
...I am of the opinion that we could learn better from our teachers and bosses than from ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, consequently, first, if, look, moreover, so, therefore, well, while, for instance, i feel, in contrast, such as, first of all, it is true, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 75.0 43.0788530466 174% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 53.0 52.1666666667 102% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1919.0 1977.66487455 97% => OK
No of words: 406.0 407.700716846 100% => OK
Chars per words: 4.72660098522 4.8611393121 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.48881294772 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.771727309 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Unique words: 198.0 212.727598566 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.487684729064 0.524837075471 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 591.3 618.680645161 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 15.0 9.59856630824 156% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 8.0 1.86738351254 428% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 46.7954057574 48.9658058833 96% => OK
Chars per sentence: 95.95 100.406767564 96% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.3 20.6045352989 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.05 5.45110844103 148% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.171211566886 0.236089414692 73% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0572568964765 0.076458572812 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0685887596687 0.0737576698707 93% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.130582481334 0.150856017488 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0833261233608 0.0645574589148 129% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.0 11.7677419355 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 58.1214874552 103% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.15 10.9000537634 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.47 8.01818996416 93% => OK
difficult_words: 73.0 86.8835125448 84% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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