Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
People today spend too much time on personal enjoyment such as doing things they like to do rather than doing things they should do.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
As some people ay hold the view that nowadays people spend more time on their enjoyment; however, others may take an opposite viewpoint and believe that the people are mostly focused on their responsibilities rather than their enjoyment. I personally agree with the second belief. In the following paragraphs, I will delve into must outstanding reasons which persuade me to put forward this perspective.
The first exquisite reason which gives the adherence to my perspective is that there is no sufficient period for the leisure activities in the people's daily tough program. It is lucidly obvious that current trend lifestyle is the hectic lifestyle. In this condition with the rush in whole events, people are in the hurry too. They just schedule their daily program which can be accountable of their basic requirement for the survival. Moreover, the other extra duration for enjoyment is considered as a luxury which solely a minor group of people possesses it. A vivid example can be given to shed the light on the subject, is my brother's example. He lives in Tehran and he is a doctor. Based on his life hectic schedule, he is able to spend merely two hours as a free time, which he impels to spend it with his sons. In the comparison of the rest 22 hours, these two hours are so short and inadequate.
Next, one should put on the concentration that there is a list of stresses which do not allow having relief moment. If I have to shed the spotlight on the specific stress, I will prefer to point to the financial stress. It is cogently explicit that the financial capability is one of the main factors presented an ideal life pattern; on the other hand, the individual’s demands and their economic costs are higher than the standard financial incomes in a society. As a result, the people are forced to work hard to be responsible for of this requirement. According to the noteworthy, intelligible survey conducted in my country, approximately sixty-nine percent of the population in Tehran spend their daily twelve hours for one or two part-time jobs to address their basic expenses. In this scenario, it is an arduous task to provide a sufficient period of the enjoyment.
Finally, the factor embraced my idea is the ratio of the free hours to busy hours in a personal program of the people is a diminutive proportion. Although there are lists of various entertainment facilities in the city presented the different kinds of enjoyment activities, it does not mean that all people gain the advantages of those facilities. It is a sound belief that all of them cost more than the standard expenses. Moreover, based on the hectic lifestyle, even the people can provide a short period and money for this kind of activities it is a very short period. Especially in comparison of the duration and the pressure of their daily life, it can be neglected so easily. Thus this period cannot be accounted as a real enjoyment.
To wrap it up, based on all aforementioned reasons one could logically draw the conclusion that nowadays people do not have this luxury to spend some hours as their enjoyment period. Since they have to be accountable for today's fast speed, they have to overcome the financial issues, and the amount of leisure period is not adequate to all of these pressures.
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Suggestion: Thus,
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Discourse Markers used:
['finally', 'first', 'however', 'if', 'may', 'moreover', 'second', 'so', 'thus', 'in fact', 'kind of', 'as a result', 'on the other hand']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.221169036335 0.229887763892 96% => OK
Verbs: 0.137440758294 0.158761421928 87% => OK
Adjectives: 0.105845181675 0.0866891130778 122% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0458135860979 0.046263068375 99% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0616113744076 0.0685040099705 90% => OK
Prepositions: 0.113744075829 0.118717715034 96% => OK
Participles: 0.0205371248025 0.0351676179071 58% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.85920644183 2.67179642975 107% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0300157977883 0.0309702414327 97% => OK
Particles: 0.00157977883096 0.00188951952338 84% => OK
Determiners: 0.126382306477 0.0887237588012 142% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0173775671406 0.0209618222197 83% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0126382306477 0.0139019557991 91% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 3319.0 2387.08602151 139% => OK
No of words: 565.0 408.028673835 138% => OK
Chars per words: 5.87433628319 5.86048508987 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.87542086881 4.48200974243 109% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.32389380531 0.338922669872 96% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.246017699115 0.251872472559 98% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.187610619469 0.174417080927 108% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.138053097345 0.112833075102 122% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.85920644183 2.67179642975 107% => OK
Unique words: 267.0 212.727598566 126% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.472566371681 0.524397521467 90% => OK
Word variations: 56.6800762661 59.2087087015 96% => OK
How many sentences: 26.0 20.6684587814 126% => OK
Sentence length: 21.7307692308 20.5533526081 106% => OK
Sentence length SD: 57.9453935965 48.84282405 119% => OK
Chars per sentence: 127.653846154 120.699889404 106% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.7307692308 20.5533526081 106% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.5 0.644075263715 78% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.5376344086 110% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.54480286738 18% => OK
Readability: 46.3325391423 45.7405998639 101% => OK
Elegance: 1.45161290323 1.45489161554 100% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.226698437373 0.300154397459 76% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.0968417780789 0.103427244359 94% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0656405672656 0.0752933317313 87% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.506718806001 0.497263757937 102% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.152915855857 0.151897553556 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0878343792691 0.114077575197 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0456806950025 0.0781384742642 58% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.478981719654 0.336927656856 142% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.118522569665 0.067059652881 177% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.176229604642 0.210909579961 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.047949331125 0.0618886996521 77% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8870967742 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.86379928315 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.91756272401 142% => OK
Positive topic words: 10.0 8.42114695341 119% => OK
Negative topic words: 4.0 2.4623655914 162% => OK
Neutral topic words: 3.0 2.75985663082 109% => OK
Total topic words: 17.0 13.6433691756 125% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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