Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Successful people try new things and take risks rather than only doing what
they already know how to do well.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Although repetition on one area makes one’s skill be perfect and outstanding, I believe that to go to brand new fields and to take risks are always outweighs practicing old skills. The reasons is that creative and ambition are indispensable qualities being successful people. In addition, to open a new door to a new area give people more opportunities to be successful. Hence, I agree with this statement that successful people try new things and take risks rather than only doing they already do very well.
First of all, being creative and ambition invoke people be curiousness about the world. They always be hungry and try new things in their life. In the other word, their lifestyle is-- stay hungry and stay foolish which it is a famous maxim for Steven Jobs. So, take Jobs as an example, as we all know that Jobs invented the Apple II, one of the highly successful mass-produced personal computers. He also took a risk to start up Pixar, which produced Toy story, the first fully computed-animated film when he was forced out to Apple. In 1997, he came back to revive Apple, which had been at the merge of bankruptcy. Jobs leaded the iMac, iPhone, and the iPad, which totally changed people’s lifestyle. If Steven Jobs didn’t have a courage to take risk to start up the new company, he wouldn’t have chance to back to Apple and develop amazing products for people.
Second, going to another field can make more chance for people to be renowned people. Sometimes in a brand new field people will found their brand new talent, which bring him more opportunities to be successful. For instance, Kendrick Lamar who is the one of my favorite rappers. He wanted to be a professional basketball player when he was in high school. Fortunately, one day, a teacher found his ode talent which invoke him to be rapper. He used his special rhyme to conquer many hip-pop fans, and even Obama paged him in 2015! After that, he still tried some new things that he cooperated with some pop singer such as Taylor Swift, The Weeknd to make his music element more multivariant. Nowadays, he became the first rapper to win the Pulitzer prize, which is a great prize to accept his incredible music creativity . If he choose to be a basketball player and he didn’t open the new door to enter the hip-pop world, he may not as success as now and people also lose a talented rapper.
In a conclusion, based on the above reasons, I think that without being creative and ambition people will never be successful. Also, if people have no courage to enter a brand new field, they will lose many chances to be successful. Therefore, I agree with that successful people would like to take risks and try new things rather than focus on the same old things.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 199, Rule ID: AGREEMENT_SENT_START[4]
Message: You should probably use: 'are'.
Suggestion: are
...ighs practicing old skills. The reasons is that creative and ambition are indispen...
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Line 3, column 94, Rule ID: ADVERB_WORD_ORDER[4]
Message: The adverb 'always' is usually put after the verb 'be'.
Suggestion: be always
...le be curiousness about the world. They always be hungry and try new things in their life...
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Line 3, column 592, Rule ID: A_INFINITVE[1]
Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
...back to revive Apple, which had been at the merge of bankruptcy. Jobs leaded the iMac, iP...
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Line 5, column 821, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
...o accept his incredible music creativity . If he choose to be a basketball player ...
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Line 5, column 830, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'he' must be used with a third-person verb: 'chooses'.
Suggestion: chooses
...his incredible music creativity . If he choose to be a basketball player and he didn&a...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, hence, if, may, second, so, still, therefore, well, as for, for instance, i think, in addition, such as, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 24.0 15.1003584229 159% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 18.0 11.0286738351 163% => OK
Pronoun: 42.0 43.0788530466 97% => OK
Preposition: 54.0 52.1666666667 104% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2282.0 1977.66487455 115% => OK
No of words: 483.0 407.700716846 118% => OK
Chars per words: 4.72463768116 4.8611393121 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.68799114503 4.48103885553 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.63617256231 2.67179642975 99% => OK
Unique words: 245.0 212.727598566 115% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.507246376812 0.524837075471 97% => OK
syllable_count: 701.1 618.680645161 113% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 15.0 9.59856630824 156% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 43.8467860022 48.9658058833 90% => OK
Chars per sentence: 99.2173913043 100.406767564 99% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.0 20.6045352989 102% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.65217391304 5.45110844103 104% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 11.8709677419 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.198179851622 0.236089414692 84% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0675687275584 0.076458572812 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.121994254064 0.0737576698707 165% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.161505546521 0.150856017488 107% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.115364725266 0.0645574589148 179% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.3 11.7677419355 96% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 58.1214874552 101% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.1 10.9000537634 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.78 8.01818996416 97% => OK
difficult_words: 95.0 86.8835125448 109% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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