It is easy to make friends while it is hard to keep the friendship for a long time. As my concern, the ability to maintain the friendship in a small group of people is more important for happiness than that to make many new friends at ease. We are as humans with limited energy to keep the relationship around you, we should appreciate the importance and meaning of friendship, the more friends you have the more you feel tired, besides, someone may consider that the more friends you have the more help you may get, I will correct this misunderstanding and address my views as follows.
To begin with, having many friends is not important for happiness, sometimes it would be a heavy burden. With the increasing number of frendship one may have, he/she has to spend extra time for the maintaince of these friendship. While we are not perpetual energetic like a computer being lugeed forever, with the limited energy, people may have less time and energy on other business. As students, they may be distracted from studying. One of my friends in high school,of course, he also may be the friend of all the boy students in my grade in that he was so social that almost everyone knew him. After class he may appear in the basketball fields or football fields even in front of Pingpong talbes because he was a good player in these sports. I even suggested him to apply for a sporting universities instead of the common ones.While he spent so much time on playing inorder to keep the firendship among us while he failed in the college examination. After two years of preparation, he went to a college in my city. Now adays we all just remeber this famous nickname "Michael Jordan in the football team" while nobody knew how was going about him.
In addion, we actually do not need so many friends as I contends it is a hard work that making so many friends with our limited energy and time.On the other hand, several close friends are enough for us. In this way , we got more time to do more meaningful business to enhance ourselves, meanwhile, you may find you like a magnet to get more friends. Just take me for example, since I started to excercise oral English, there were several foreign friends coming into my life, which was hard to believe for myself at first. While now after half year of communicatin with them, I got to realize that the more abilities you have, the more people want to be your friends.
In all, I belive the ablity of keeping friendship in small group is more important in that we do not need so many friedns in our life.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 287, Rule ID: NOUN_AROUND_IT[1]
Message: Consider using 'the surrounding relationship'?
Suggestion: the surrounding relationship
...e as humans with limited energy to keep the relationship around you, we should appreciate the importance an...
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Line 3, column 213, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this friendship' or 'these friendships'?
Suggestion: this friendship; these friendships
... spend extra time for the maintaince of these friendship. While we are not perpetual energetic l...
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Line 3, column 470, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , of
...udying. One of my friends in high school,of course, he also may be the friend of al...
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Line 3, column 794, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[2]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'university'?
Suggestion: university
...n suggested him to apply for a sporting universities instead of the common ones.While he spe...
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Line 3, column 834, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: While
...universities instead of the common ones.While he spent so much time on playing inorde...
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Line 3, column 834, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “While” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...universities instead of the common ones.While he spent so much time on playing inorde...
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Line 5, column 57, Rule ID: NON3PRS_VERB[1]
Message: The pronoun 'I' must be used with a non-third-person form of a verb: 'contend'
Suggestion: contend
...tually do not need so many friends as I contends it is a hard work that making so many f...
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Line 5, column 145, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: On
...riends with our limited energy and time.On the other hand, several close friends a...
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Line 5, column 216, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...e friends are enough for us. In this way , we got more time to do more meaningful ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, besides, first, if, may, so, while, as to, for example, of course, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 13.8261648746 36% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 65.0 43.0788530466 151% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 66.0 52.1666666667 127% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2103.0 1977.66487455 106% => OK
No of words: 461.0 407.700716846 113% => OK
Chars per words: 4.56182212581 4.8611393121 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.63367139033 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.53340808375 2.67179642975 95% => OK
Unique words: 233.0 212.727598566 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.505422993492 0.524837075471 96% => OK
syllable_count: 654.3 618.680645161 106% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.59856630824 146% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 9.0 3.51792114695 256% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 11.0 4.94265232975 223% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 27.0 20.1344086022 134% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 64.060849101 48.9658058833 131% => OK
Chars per sentence: 123.705882353 100.406767564 123% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.1176470588 20.6045352989 132% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.76470588235 5.45110844103 124% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 5.5376344086 163% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.318025681979 0.236089414692 135% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.113302759183 0.076458572812 148% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.102708044641 0.0737576698707 139% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.218571095731 0.150856017488 145% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.101861864102 0.0645574589148 158% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.6 11.7677419355 116% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 60.99 58.1214874552 105% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.46 10.9000537634 87% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.72 8.01818996416 96% => OK
difficult_words: 80.0 86.8835125448 92% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 18.0 10.002688172 180% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.0537634409 127% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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