Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
The rules that societies today expect young people to follow and obey are too strict.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
People could be happier when they are freely choose what they do without any external restriction. Within this understanding, I believe that it is too strict to expect that young people obey all the rules given by societies such as going to university and getting married in due time. This is because young people can be happy when they do things what they want and when they do without outside pressures.
First of all, one can enjoy their lives when they are able to do what they want. If one is forced to do things only by rules, then he will live his life without happiness. For instance, a friend of mine went to the university only because his parents wanted it, even though he wanted to be a soccer player from his childhood. He tried to adjust himself to the academic environment, but he was very depressed since he had to study all day even though he wanted to play soccer. Then he watched a lot of youtube videos regarding soccer games, which made his grades very poor. From this example I thought that letting people do what they aspire is highly important quality of a good society.
Moreover, even though behaviors compelled by rules are preferred things for someone, there is enormous difference between doing things that obliged and doing things that freely chosen. To illustrate, reports have it that 70% of children who are not willing to do their homework say that they would like to do it if there is no punishment from teachers. They feel that the punishments from their instructors make them hate the assignments given in class, even though the subjects are the ones that they are interested. In this regard, I think that too strict rules make people feel bad about their situations, making things worse.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 46, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'chosen'.
Suggestion: chosen
...e could be happier when they are freely choose what they do without any external restr...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, moreover, regarding, so, then, for instance, i think, such as, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 13.8261648746 29% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.0286738351 145% => OK
Pronoun: 50.0 43.0788530466 116% => OK
Preposition: 38.0 52.1666666667 73% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1428.0 1977.66487455 72% => OK
No of words: 304.0 407.700716846 75% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.69736842105 4.8611393121 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.17559525986 4.48103885553 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.40415297424 2.67179642975 90% => OK
Unique words: 166.0 212.727598566 78% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.546052631579 0.524837075471 104% => OK
syllable_count: 430.2 618.680645161 70% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 20.6003584229 63% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 35.4304051553 48.9658058833 72% => OK
Chars per sentence: 109.846153846 100.406767564 109% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.3846153846 20.6045352989 113% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.0 5.45110844103 128% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 4.53405017921 66% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 11.8709677419 51% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.121998930268 0.236089414692 52% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0525790559265 0.076458572812 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0562685796046 0.0737576698707 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.094729817989 0.150856017488 63% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0511588236967 0.0645574589148 79% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.4 11.7677419355 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 65.05 58.1214874552 112% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.28 10.9000537634 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.69 8.01818996416 96% => OK
difficult_words: 56.0 86.8835125448 64% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Minimum four paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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