Making important decisions that determine the future of society as a whole is an element that is set to assume a great influence on mostly all ordinary walks of lives in developing countries and modern societies. On the first side, from many sociologists' view point, young people do not have any chance to have a significant role in their society. On the other side, some other people argue, the teenagers have a noticeable influence on the decisions of a society. While both sides are taking their own positions, the second view also has some proponents. From my view point, the first attitude carries more weight. In the following, I will delve into some conspicuous aspects which persuade me to put forward this perspective.
In the first aspect, sociologists claim educators do not have enough working experiences to solve problems in their country. What thinkers mean to say is this, they need to get some experiences for making big decisions. For instance, a mechanical engineer who does not have enough experience in the industry could damage industrial tools and facilities. On the other hand, young people want to feel the satisfaction of being a part of their society as a whole. In the other words, they want to have influence in their community and be the best for the industry. For example, it would have a good influence in the society if the youth could do some voluntary tasks for industries to taste some experiments, like what in the developed countries is happening such as, the companies of Apple and Microsoft in the United States of America that there have been some volunteers who become an employee of them. Thus, not only newcomers of universities want to be a part of projects in the country, but also government wants to help too. But, there is not a good system to provide this need in less developed countries.
Alongside with the first reason elaborated above, from a great proportion of educators view point, they have a conspicuous effect on the society. To shed more light on the issue, their education system matches with economic needs. Hence, most courses of universities and its labs do cover industrial instant needs. Here is one example of what erudite thinkers mean, the most science books of universities are updated and labs either, like the universities in the USA and Korea. In fact, they can have opportunities to solve important issues of their country. On the other side of the rope, the education system does not match with economic needs in less developed societies. To illustrate, virtually updated books are facts and concepts in the universities and there is no sign of experimental books that touches real industry issues. For example, some courses need labs for trying concepts of the books. However, nearly most universities do not have these requirements, like the most universities in Iran. Thus, university concepts and learning tools better to reach essential needs of industry by the government in order to have educators who can take risks in jobs to determine the future of their society, Like having a realistic view of what they will experience of the jobs in modern countries.
All in all, to put everything in a nutshell, a broad look at the main points and discussions, it can be easily assumed that all communities want to have a significant role in their country. To fulfill such a requirement, not only university staff should have a real view of what economics’ wants, but also governors better to provide a good and reliable system to satisfy those needs.
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Suggestion:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, hence, however, if, look, second, so, thus, while, for example, for instance, in fact, such as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 31.0 43.0788530466 72% => OK
Preposition: 93.0 52.1666666667 178% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 8.0752688172 198% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2947.0 1977.66487455 149% => OK
No of words: 597.0 407.700716846 146% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.93634840871 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.94303383012 4.48103885553 110% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.78890800324 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Unique words: 265.0 212.727598566 125% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.443886097152 0.524837075471 85% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 930.6 618.680645161 150% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 8.0 3.08781362007 259% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 20.0 4.94265232975 405% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 26.0 20.6003584229 126% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 65.51982626 48.9658058833 134% => OK
Chars per sentence: 113.346153846 100.406767564 113% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.9615384615 20.6045352989 111% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.03846153846 5.45110844103 92% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.15945486698 0.236089414692 68% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0465785080191 0.076458572812 61% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0467860593666 0.0737576698707 63% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0984839979154 0.150856017488 65% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0491339566487 0.0645574589148 76% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.3 11.7677419355 113% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 58.1214874552 85% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.1575268817 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.67 10.9000537634 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.56 8.01818996416 94% => OK
difficult_words: 107.0 86.8835125448 123% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Write the essay in 30 minutes.
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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