Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Young people today have no influence on the important decisions that determine the future of society as a whole.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Determining whether the young people has an influence on decisions to make future is very important matter to learn. Knowing this fact will help the governments to decide better on reasons of this issue and figure out a way to make this happen. Some people may think that the young people is influential in making decision about future while others would disagree. In my opinion the youth is playing an important role in decisions nowadays because of two main evidences.
The main reason is that there are a lot of young managers in our society who are responsible of important decisions. In today's society many companies are being managed by young people and also there are a lot of entrepreneurs who had successful startups. The owners of these startups are mostly the young people who can risk and make decisions which can affect the future of the technology and society. For example our city's governor is a 35-year-old boy who have brought our city a lot of benefits. Once, he started a project to build a subway line a distant part of town and no one before dared to do so, hence the people in that area benefited from his decisions a lot and their apartments price raised as a result of increased reachability. This experience taught me that the youth is most important persons who decide about our future.
The second reason is that the young people are more knowledgeable than older people. In the past, education was not important that much and most of the people were less knowledgeable, however, with increased amount of education and its higher quality and also the need of the society to more educated people young people are more educated nowadays. Because of this knowledge they are making decisions that more detrimental for society rather than less-educated old people who cannot decide about these situation. For instance, the governor of our city that I mention in the previous paragraph has got a Ph.D. in urban management from Tehran University and has lot of publications in top-ranked journals. In the subway project they had lots of problem to construct this subway and also in financial issues but with the virtue of his and his team's knowledge he was able to tackle these problems and finish the project in time with very limited budget. As you can see knowledgeable young people make important decisions in our current society.
In sum, though some may disagree with my opinion, I deeply believe that the young people are most important deciders in our world. Not only are they in important managing roles but also they are more knowledgeable than the elders.
Governments should keep using young people in important roles and also try to increase their persistence in these kinds of fields.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 497, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this situation' or 'these situations'?
Suggestion: this situation; these situations
...ated old people who cannot decide about these situation. For instance, the governor of our city...
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Line 5, column 736, Rule ID: LOTS_OF_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun problem seems to be countable; consider using: 'lots of problems'.
Suggestion: lots of problems
...ournals. In the subway project they had lots of problem to construct this subway and also in fi...
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Line 5, column 951, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “As” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...oject in time with very limited budget. As you can see knowledgeable young people ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, hence, however, may, second, so, while, for example, for instance, as a result, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 15.1003584229 146% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.0286738351 145% => OK
Pronoun: 44.0 43.0788530466 102% => OK
Preposition: 63.0 52.1666666667 121% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2266.0 1977.66487455 115% => OK
No of words: 464.0 407.700716846 114% => OK
Chars per words: 4.88362068966 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.64119157421 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.6346248932 2.67179642975 99% => OK
Unique words: 217.0 212.727598566 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.467672413793 0.524837075471 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 716.4 618.680645161 116% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 9.59856630824 31% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 53.5349317705 48.9658058833 109% => OK
Chars per sentence: 119.263157895 100.406767564 119% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.4210526316 20.6045352989 119% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.47368421053 5.45110844103 100% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.25134466086 0.236089414692 106% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0896518674052 0.076458572812 117% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.058639012217 0.0737576698707 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.141591640981 0.150856017488 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0386562502183 0.0645574589148 60% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.8 11.7677419355 117% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 55.58 58.1214874552 96% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.32 10.9000537634 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.16 8.01818996416 102% => OK
difficult_words: 98.0 86.8835125448 113% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 70 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.