Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Young people today have no influence on the important decisions that determine the future of society as a whole.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Do young people have any influence on the decisions which determine the development of society? It's a heated discussed topic in the university recently. While some people tend to believe that young people can't influence the future of society, from my perspective, young people definitely can influence the future of themselves and the development of society.
Take my friend Li's experience for instance, who influenced the world's quantum theory development only at 26. Li majors in quantum theory at a famous university in China. He is the kind of man in my hometown who is called a genius who really good at math and physics. What impresses people around him is that he never gets tired of physics, especially quantum theory. Every time you see him, you will find that he is thinking about the mysterious things about quantum. It's very lucky for him to be admitted to Tsing Hua university, one of the best universities in China, in the college entrance exam. There is no double that he chooses quantum theory as his major, and his mentor is one of the top professors in the field. After solving a big problem together with his professor, he became famous nationwide. But he was only 26 that year.
Another example is my colleague Wang, who helped the MeiTuan company solve a big system problem, which prevented much money loss for the corporation. It was Friday night, he was still doing his work at the company. When he decided to leave and go home, he saw a message in the corporation's work group. The boss said there was a machine room that was out of electricity in WuHan. Someone must help transfer the system's machine room immediately. But all of the people in the corporation have left, only Wang was still there. He went back to his sit in a second and transferred the system machinery room to another room online. The whole system was running normally after his operation. He really helped the company save a lot of money in the accident.
In conclusion, young people influence the world in many ways. Students contribute to the world's technological development and young workers help solve many problems resulting in social prosperity in the company.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 97, Rule ID: IT_IS[17]
Message: Did you mean 'it's' (='it is') instead of 'its' (possessive pronoun)?
Suggestion: It's; It is
...h determine the development of society? Its a heated discussed topic in the univers...
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Line 1, column 206, Rule ID: CANT[1]
Message: Did you mean 'can't' or 'cannot'?
Suggestion: can't; cannot
...eople tend to believe that young people cant influence the future of society, from m...
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Line 3, column 448, Rule ID: ALL_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'all the'.
Suggestion: all the
...e systems machine room immediately. But all of the people in the corporation have left, on...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, really, second, so, still, while, for instance, in conclusion, kind of
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 9.8082437276 31% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 36.0 43.0788530466 84% => OK
Preposition: 47.0 52.1666666667 90% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 8.0752688172 173% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1793.0 1977.66487455 91% => OK
No of words: 372.0 407.700716846 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.81989247312 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.39173103935 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.67137088321 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Unique words: 203.0 212.727598566 95% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.545698924731 0.524837075471 104% => OK
syllable_count: 568.8 618.680645161 92% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 38.0655091489 48.9658058833 78% => OK
Chars per sentence: 77.9565217391 100.406767564 78% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.1739130435 20.6045352989 78% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.26086956522 5.45110844103 60% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 11.0 4.88709677419 225% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.141286856329 0.236089414692 60% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0423604363111 0.076458572812 55% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0742978153836 0.0737576698707 101% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.106652306135 0.150856017488 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0932837137889 0.0645574589148 144% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.4 11.7677419355 80% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 63.7 58.1214874552 110% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 10.1575268817 83% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.38 10.9000537634 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.0 8.01818996416 100% => OK
difficult_words: 84.0 86.8835125448 97% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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