Do you agree or disagree: These days children spend more time on doing homework or participating in school-related activities or sports. However, they should be given more time to do whatever they want.
Extracurricular activities are the kind of experience that could have a formative impact on children. Some educators argue that young kids should be given permission to decide how to spend their spare time after school. I think it is a smart move.
To begin with, after-school activities are supposed to be fun and it would not make any sense unless children are to decide on their own. When schoolwork has already put too much strain on children, they would easily burn out if they are deprived of the right to do what they want. Some may argue that school-related activities and sports events can also serve as a good way to release stress, but let us face it, it is next to impossible to cater to all needs. Everyone has their own passion to pursue. When I was a kid, I was a huge fan of classical music, but instead of taking me to concerts, my folks gave me a soccer and sent me to tryouts. It was totally a nightmare. I could not sleep at night at all, feeling so tense and stressed up. Even up to now it still gives me creeps when I am reminded of this experience. Only when children spend their spare time on what truly appeals to them can they take a break and recover from the stress of study.
Besides, it opens up doors to limitless possibilities for children who have a hard time coping with school. I know a kid who did not do well in school, neither did he show any interest in sports. But he was so fascinated by Chinese herb that he could spend hours watching documentaries about traditional Chinese medicine or looking up original references in the library with relish. His parents never forced him to study for the sake of school, but rather showed great support to him and even signed him up for an online Chinese medicine course. When he applied for college, he handed in a personal statement that stood out instantly. Later on, he was admitted to NYU with a full scholarship because not only he shows great promise in medicine, but his one-of-a-kind hobby speaks of novelty and courage. If his parents failed to be so open-minded, he would end up with a poor grade and a low self-esteem.
In a word, apart from schoolwork and sports, children should be encouraged to follow their heart and explore their own interests when they are free.
Comments
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quite a good quality. complete within 30mins?
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 4, column 292, Rule ID: MASS_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Possible agreement error - use third-person verb forms for singular and mass nouns: 'argues'.
Suggestion: argues
...he right to do what they want. Some may argue that school-related activities and spor...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, if, look, may, so, still, well, apart from, as to, i think, kind of, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 51.0 43.0788530466 118% => OK
Preposition: 62.0 52.1666666667 119% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalization wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1862.0 1977.66487455 94% => OK
No of words: 411.0 407.700716846 101% => OK
Chars per words: 4.5304136253 4.8611393121 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.50256981431 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.60764373073 2.67179642975 98% => OK
Unique words: 235.0 212.727598566 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.571776155718 0.524837075471 109% => OK
syllable_count: 576.0 618.680645161 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Interrogative: 3.0 0.994623655914 302% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 46.8201612556 48.9658058833 96% => OK
Chars per sentence: 93.1 100.406767564 93% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.55 20.6045352989 100% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.1 5.45110844103 94% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.193660230388 0.236089414692 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0532506365953 0.076458572812 70% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0632543871975 0.0737576698707 86% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.126363284173 0.150856017488 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0382386429589 0.0645574589148 59% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.2 11.7677419355 87% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 68.1 58.1214874552 117% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.1575268817 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.99 10.9000537634 82% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.59 8.01818996416 95% => OK
difficult_words: 77.0 86.8835125448 89% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Try to use less pronouns (like 'It, I, They, We, You...') as the subject of a sentence.
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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