:Do you agree or disagree: young people today are more independentthan in the past?
Sophisticted technology and golbalization have a tremendous impact on our well-being and progress,they can enhance our success in imeasurable ways because they can eccompasses our core ,therefore ,Iagree that the youth are less independent than past because of those two realms,and I will explore that in the following eassy..
It is without a shadow of adoubt that the technical developments have led the youth to become less dependent than previous time .In fact ,in the past the people did not even have the concept of computer which we are using today to perform many duties and study tasks and related works,for example ,younger generations are competent at searching the internet and implement vast array of modern devices like I pad and tablet to gather information and acquire knowledge on diverse subjects without help from their mentors ,consequently , technological innovations have broadened youth's congnitive abilities and have allowed them to dodge being relaint on parents or teacher's advise.
Another equally silent point in corroborating my instance is that the globalization has a great influnce on young's acqiured attributes and autonomous traits ,indeed,globalization has extremely affected their interpersonal and self sufficiency skills in postive ways, for instance , seeking knowledge oveseas independently has urged the youth to expand their perspectives to a considerable degree by collaborating and interacting with peers and friends from different cultures ,the youth now are able to communicate more intimately and build up more international relationships .Hence ,this has a crucial effect on the youth's desire to be free ,which in the long run will establish mentally intelligent and independent thinkers ,capable of making logical decisions makers without assistant from any one .
To sum up , I agree that the youth's today are more self-supporting than the youth in the past by the virtue of technological revolution , which prompted the knowledge acquisition and not to forget out of the state and oversaes education endeavor ,which has advocated self reliance characteristics .Hopefully , young generation will continue to acquire benefits from those aspects and address them properly toward their needs.and we have to continue to support the youth to get their advance education and need
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, consequently, hence, if, so, therefore, well, for example, for instance, in fact, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 21.0 13.8261648746 152% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 43.0788530466 63% => OK
Preposition: 52.0 52.1666666667 100% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 8.0752688172 186% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1976.0 1977.66487455 100% => OK
No of words: 353.0 407.700716846 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.59773371105 4.8611393121 115% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.33454660006 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.22564357908 2.67179642975 121% => OK
Unique words: 221.0 212.727598566 104% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.626062322946 0.524837075471 119% => OK
syllable_count: 615.6 618.680645161 100% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 9.59856630824 42% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.51792114695 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 4.0 20.6003584229 19% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 88.0 20.1344086022 437% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 179.028454442 48.9658058833 366% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 494.0 100.406767564 492% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 88.25 20.6045352989 428% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 24.0 5.45110844103 440% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 37.0 5.5376344086 668% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 11.8709677419 34% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.88709677419 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.102805335921 0.236089414692 44% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0590273550548 0.076458572812 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0312091688162 0.0737576698707 42% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0590273550548 0.150856017488 39% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0312091688162 0.0645574589148 48% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 49.1 11.7677419355 417% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: -26.3 58.1214874552 -45% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 21.2 6.10430107527 347% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 38.8 10.1575268817 382% => Flesch kincaid grade is high.
coleman_liau_index: 16.38 10.9000537634 150% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 13.1 8.01818996416 163% => OK
difficult_words: 114.0 86.8835125448 131% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 29.0 10.002688172 290% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 37.2 10.0537634409 370% => Gunning_fog is high.
text_standard: 29.0 10.247311828 283% => The average readability is very high. Good job!
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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