Do you agree or disagree?
One of the best way that parents can help their teenage children prepare for adult life is to encourage them to take apart-time job.
Use specific reasons and examples.
It is undeniable that taking a job by teenage children is a popular topic which has caused heated debate in a long period of time because it affects everybody in his or her daily lives. Depending on personal experience, personality type, and emotional concern, people differ greatly in their attitudes toward this issue. As fa as I am concerned, I agree with this statement that having a part-time job help teenage children to prepare themselves for future life. In the following, I will explain the specific reasons which I think are the most common viewpoints nowadays.
To begin with, one of the compelling reasons that justifies my opinion is that teenage children need to know what things they capable of. Having a part-time job helps them to recognize their talents and to try flourish these talents, and consequently they get their self-confidence to pave the way to success. For example, my brother took a part-time job last year while he was going to high school. First, he did not know how to handle the job but after a while he learned many things about the job and the most important benefit was the awareness of his ability. I think it is important that a teenage child be aware of his or her ability to be able to make a proper decision for the future career.
Another equally notable point supporting my opinion is that having a part-time job help teenage children to be familiar with accepting a responsibility. They need to be responsible for their actions. For instance, when I was in high school, I thought I remain a little boy forever and never experienced any taking responsibility. But when my father introduced me to a mechanic and I took that part-time job I realized that it is time to move forward and behave like an adult. Thus, I think a teenage child do not step forward toward his or her future unless he or she be responsible for a serious work such as a part-time job.
To sum up, by taking into account all the above factors, we may reach the conclusion that having a part-time job is helping teenage children to prepare themselves for future life due to their awareness of talents and their taking responsibility.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 116, Rule ID: PERIOD_OF_TIME[1]
Message: Use simply 'period'.
Suggestion: period
...hich has caused heated debate in a long period of time because it affects everybody in his or ...
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Line 3, column 568, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'she' must be used with a third-person verb: 'is'.
Suggestion: is
...ward his or her future unless he or she be responsible for a serious work such as ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, consequently, first, if, may, so, thus, while, for example, for instance, i think, such as, to begin with, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 57.0 43.0788530466 132% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 43.0 52.1666666667 82% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1776.0 1977.66487455 90% => OK
No of words: 378.0 407.700716846 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.69841269841 4.8611393121 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.40933352052 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.77489898697 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Unique words: 193.0 212.727598566 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.510582010582 0.524837075471 97% => OK
syllable_count: 572.4 618.680645161 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 20.1344086022 124% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 42.7745511049 48.9658058833 87% => OK
Chars per sentence: 118.4 100.406767564 118% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.2 20.6045352989 122% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.06666666667 5.45110844103 148% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.312813542724 0.236089414692 132% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.107134559274 0.076458572812 140% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0664195822331 0.0737576698707 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.210352418087 0.150856017488 139% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0300211948687 0.0645574589148 47% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.3 11.7677419355 113% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.56 58.1214874552 94% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.1575268817 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.28 10.9000537634 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.8 8.01818996416 97% => OK
difficult_words: 70.0 86.8835125448 81% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.0537634409 119% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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