Do you prefer to stay at one place or move around

Essay topics:

Do you prefer to stay at one place or move around?

Nowadays, people try to collect plenty of experiences in their lives since they know that if they have useful experience, they will be successful in their future lives. In this way, some people prefer to change their habitat and go to another place but others would rather stay at their current place. From my point of view, if people try to change their location, they will progress and they are able to obtain ample experiences in their life as well. My arguments for this point are listed as follows.

First, if you try other places so as to live, you can develop. Under this condition you maybe earn more money, because you can go to another place in order to attain better job with better income. As a result, you can earn much money in your life. However, if you stay at your current place maybe you are not able to get the best job with high salary. In addition, by going to other places you can learn new language. For instance, if you go to the United States for living or even for studying, you will learn English undoubtedly. Therefore, you can progress due to your ability in speaking English.

Second, new places allow you to raise your experience in your life. In this condition, you will be familiar with other cultures. For example, if you go to china, you will learn about their foods or about their costume. Hence, if you have a friendship with a Chinese person in the future, you know how to treat with him or you certainly know which food is proper for him. Furthermore, by going to other locations you would face with different circumstances and you will learn how to react with them when such conditions happen for you in the future.

All in all, from what I have been discussed above, these days
, people want to increase their knowledge in their lives. Under this condition, some people believe that if they go to other places and move around, they will be successful persons but others prefer to stay at their current location. In my opinion, if people go to other places it would be practical because not only can they develop in their life, but also they are able to raise their experience in their future lives.

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Average: 8.7 (6 votes)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 32, Rule ID: SO_AS_TO[1]
Message: Use simply 'to'
Suggestion: to
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Line 7, column 63, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...I have been discussed above, these days , people want to increase their knowledge...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, hence, however, if, may, second, so, therefore, well, as to, for example, for instance, in addition, you know, as a result, in my opinion

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 9.8082437276 163% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 11.0286738351 36% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 65.0 43.0788530466 151% => OK
Preposition: 62.0 52.1666666667 119% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1764.0 1977.66487455 89% => OK
No of words: 386.0 407.700716846 95% => OK
Chars per words: 4.56994818653 4.8611393121 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.43248042346 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.28044337426 2.67179642975 85% => OK
Unique words: 176.0 212.727598566 83% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.455958549223 0.524837075471 87% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 542.7 618.680645161 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.994623655914 0% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 9.0 3.51792114695 256% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 10.0 4.94265232975 202% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 46.0804427303 48.9658058833 94% => OK
Chars per sentence: 92.8421052632 100.406767564 92% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.3157894737 20.6045352989 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.84210526316 5.45110844103 162% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.23941753924 0.236089414692 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0946325331062 0.076458572812 124% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.077467420199 0.0737576698707 105% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.119194137077 0.150856017488 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0760707423763 0.0645574589148 118% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.3 11.7677419355 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 68.1 58.1214874552 117% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.1575268817 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.23 10.9000537634 85% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.16 8.01818996416 89% => OK
difficult_words: 62.0 86.8835125448 71% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200

Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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