There is a controversial debate about effect of technological devices on children education . Some groups of parents hold the in view that new devices do not affect children education. Other groups of parents opposes this view and believe that that such devices cause distraction and educational difficulties. In my vantage point, I am more inclined with the letter groups for a variety of reason.
First, new technological device causes children to waste a lot of time. Typically, children spend one hour to two hours playing computer games, however, there are instances when children are spending more than four hours playing. This extended period of playing may cause several problems to children. They might lose their concentration abilities, find difficulties in falling asleep, and be more aggressive. A compelling example about this is the change in my cousin's behavior. As He arrives from school at three o'clock, he does not start studying before six. Hopelessly does his parents refrain him from playing, but in vain. Therefore, cellphones and computer may cause real difficulties for parents to educate their children properly.
Secondly, new technological devices disrupt communication between family members. Children, nowadays, are so much attached to their cellphones that they no more communicate effectively with their parents. In the past, children were talking to each other while they were eating, drinking, or watching television. However, nowadays, parents find difficulties communicating with their children because most of the time they are online chating instead of studying. Therefore, new technological devices have not only affected education but also the way children communicate with their parents and with each other.
Although the aforementioned reason are the first to cross my mind at a glance, they are by no mean the only reason available. In fact, these a further subtle reason, which is a study that was published in the children academic journal.The study was conducted on one hundred and twenty students in the 5th grade where students were test for the effect of cellphone on their concentration abilities. Astonishingly, the study shows that students who use cellphone were less able to concentrate, Furthermore, their quality of sleep was worsened. Thus, in conclusion, this study make us conclude that computers not only cause children to be distracted from learning, but also have more difficulties falling asleep.
To wrap up, contemplating the aforementioned reasons, one soon realizes that although cell phones and technological devices help children to communicate, they might have devastating effect on the quality of life of children
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, however, if, may, second, secondly, so, therefore, thus, while, in conclusion, in fact
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 36.0 43.0788530466 84% => OK
Preposition: 54.0 52.1666666667 104% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2286.0 1977.66487455 116% => OK
No of words: 414.0 407.700716846 102% => OK
Chars per words: 5.52173913043 4.8611393121 114% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.51076378781 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.00485309302 2.67179642975 112% => OK
Unique words: 223.0 212.727598566 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.538647342995 0.524837075471 103% => OK
syllable_count: 697.5 618.680645161 113% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 50.3514918078 48.9658058833 103% => OK
Chars per sentence: 103.909090909 100.406767564 103% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.8181818182 20.6045352989 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.31818181818 5.45110844103 98% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 10.0 5.5376344086 181% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 11.8709677419 42% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 12.0 3.85842293907 311% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.203991996258 0.236089414692 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0579160424316 0.076458572812 76% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0472584395983 0.0737576698707 64% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.11165612869 0.150856017488 74% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0359094467866 0.0645574589148 56% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.0 11.7677419355 119% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.75 58.1214874552 77% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.74 10.9000537634 135% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.38 8.01818996416 105% => OK
difficult_words: 101.0 86.8835125448 116% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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