Essay topics: TPO-46 - Independent Writing Task
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
The opinions of celebrities, such as famous entertainers and athletes, are more important to younger people than they are to older people.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
There is a widespread belief that the opinions of well-known entertainers and athletes have more effect on young people than on older ones. Although this idea may have some flaws, I accept and support it in general because of the reasons which will be discussed in details below.
Firstly, the majority of contemporary famous entertainers and sportsmen use as a main means of communication such social services as Facebook, Twitter and Instagram which are heavily used by youngsters as well. Many adolescents and young adults are subscribed to the channels, pages and accounts of the today's stars. The information from those sources are often discussed and shared among the subscribers as well. By contrast, people who belong to an older age usually do not have this kind of addiction to the internet services and they do not follow those famous personalities on-line.
Secondly, many young people do not have completely formed opinions about many topics. Thus they may easily accept opinions and prospects of their idols. By contrast, middle aged adults and retirees have already formed their positions about the majority of questions and it is quite a difficult task to alter it. To buttress the stance we may take look at some psychological researches which were carried out on a large group of people who were aged from 15 to 80. The people were given certain information which formed their opinion about a novel issue about which they didn't have any previous knowledge. The study showcased that before an opinion formed it is easy to impact on it; however, after an opinion is formed it remains stable.
Finally, many youngsters pay attention to words and opinions of celebrities because they do not have real troubles about which they have to care of. I profoundly believe that not having real difficulties and necessity to be responsible for someone allow them to be passion about opinions of famous people. However, the situation changes dramatically after they become adults. I can illustrate this position via my personal experience. When I was a teenager I adored Eminem and his music, I paid attention to his words and opinions; however, after I married my beloved wife and a daughter was born, I forget about Eminem and all my attention was devoted to my family and necessity to create comfortable conditions for the spouse and the baby.
To wrap up, young people pay attention to the opinions of modern celebrities because of many reasons and the main one is that they are young and nonchalant.
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Essay evaluation report
Sentence: Many adolescents and young adults are subscribed to the channels, pages and accounts of the today's stars.
Description: The token the is not usually followed by a noun, singular, adverbial, genitive
Suggestion: Refer to the and today's
not having real difficulties and necessity to be responsible for someone allow them to be passion about opinions of famous people
not having real difficulties and necessity to be responsible for someone allows them to be passionate about the opinions of famous people
flaws:
The examples in the third argument should be about young people and old people. not teenager to adults.
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 22 in 30
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 2 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 18 15
No. of Words: 421 350
No. of Characters: 2052 1500
No. of Different Words: 213 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.53 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.874 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.663 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 150 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 107 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 74 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 46 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 23.389 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 10.652 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.611 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.316 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.541 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.093 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 87, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Thus,
...tely formed opinions about many topics. Thus they may easily accept opinions and pro...
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Line 5, column 571, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: didn't
...on about a novel issue about which they didnt have any previous knowledge. The study...
^^^^^
Line 7, column 249, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'someone' must be used with a third-person verb: 'allows'.
Suggestion: allows
...necessity to be responsible for someone allow them to be passion about opinions of fa...
^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, first, firstly, however, if, look, may, second, secondly, so, thus, well, in general, kind of
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 21.0 13.8261648746 152% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 41.0 43.0788530466 95% => OK
Preposition: 58.0 52.1666666667 111% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.0752688172 136% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2103.0 1977.66487455 106% => OK
No of words: 420.0 407.700716846 103% => OK
Chars per words: 5.00714285714 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.52701905584 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.70029287905 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 213.0 212.727598566 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.507142857143 0.524837075471 97% => OK
syllable_count: 671.4 618.680645161 109% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Interrogative: 1.0 0.994623655914 101% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 56.7638871897 48.9658058833 116% => OK
Chars per sentence: 116.833333333 100.406767564 116% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.3333333333 20.6045352989 113% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.94444444444 5.45110844103 109% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.133683915809 0.236089414692 57% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0460915057537 0.076458572812 60% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0441338333536 0.0737576698707 60% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0798147839904 0.150856017488 53% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0170473554387 0.0645574589148 26% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.8 11.7677419355 117% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 58.1214874552 83% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 10.1575268817 121% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.07 10.9000537634 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.57 8.01818996416 107% => OK
difficult_words: 101.0 86.8835125448 116% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
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Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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