The extended family is less important now than it was in the past

Unlike the past, these days, there are few people who live with their extended family such as grandparents, cousins, aunts, and uncles. They gather together when a big event occurs among them. However, there is an argument regarding extended family. Some people believe that extended family is less important than before. In contrast, other people oppose it. In my opinion, I disagree with this statement. I have two reasons with regard to my opinion.

First of all, people can get help from their relatives when something happens. When they have some problems, they can depend on and support each other. I have a compelling example of this. When I was young, my grandparents took care of me because my parents were working. Still now, when an inevitable situation arises, one of my relatives comes to my house and looks after me.

Another reason that support my opinion is that people can share the burden in monetary aspects. When they lack money or have financial problems, they split part of money. I have a good example regarding this. When my grandparents have an illness, my uncle, my aunt, and my mom assume part of the hospital cost to share the burden in economic aspects.

Consequently, I disagree with the topic that relative is less important than before. First, we can get help from them when we have some problems. Second, they are able to share the burden in monetary aspects and can deal with the problem.

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Average: 6.3 (3 votes)
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
consequently, first, however, look, regarding, second, so, still, in contrast, such as, first of all, in my opinion, with regard to

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 15.1003584229 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 13.8261648746 43% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 40.0 43.0788530466 93% => OK
Preposition: 31.0 52.1666666667 59% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1189.0 1977.66487455 60% => OK
No of words: 245.0 407.700716846 60% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.85306122449 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.95632099841 4.48103885553 88% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.44264486828 2.67179642975 91% => OK
Unique words: 137.0 212.727598566 64% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.559183673469 0.524837075471 107% => OK
syllable_count: 369.9 618.680645161 60% => syllable counts are too short.
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.59856630824 146% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 12.0 20.1344086022 60% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 29.9026120094 48.9658058833 61% => OK
Chars per sentence: 62.5789473684 100.406767564 62% => OK
Words per sentence: 12.8947368421 20.6045352989 63% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.89473684211 5.45110844103 126% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 11.8709677419 51% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.145710736377 0.236089414692 62% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0505520618594 0.076458572812 66% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.104922555207 0.0737576698707 142% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0927232030625 0.150856017488 61% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0876562451914 0.0645574589148 136% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 7.9 11.7677419355 67% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 67.76 58.1214874552 117% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.8 10.1575268817 67% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.96 10.9000537634 91% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.58 8.01818996416 95% => OK
difficult_words: 52.0 86.8835125448 60% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 4.5 10.002688172 45% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 6.8 10.0537634409 68% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

Minimum 250 words wanted.

Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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