A friend of yours has received some money and plans to use all of it either to go on vacation or to buy a carYour friend asked you for advice. Compare your friend's two choices and explain which one you think your friend should choose.

It's my pleasure t ogive advice to my friend on the choice he would make. As for me, I suggest my friend to buy a car instead of going on vacation. As we all know the money we need to purchase a car is still so high that one can use this money to have a trip to the Antractica if he really want to. So I will offer the reasons of my advice as follows.

To begin with, as an adult we should have the ablity to drive. Due to the development of the society,more and more people have cars. It is almost a basical requirment foro us to drive.Now it is the time for my friend to upgrade his way of commuting. As before, he was always riding electirc bikes.IF my friend learned how to drive, we will travell together by driving. What's more, I would have the chance of drinking in the future if we party together. Once as my friend could not drive, I have to drive him home and sent him upstrairs. While now if he is the driver, I will enjoy the time of drinking which I could not imagine with him before.

In addtion, my friend would possibly end up his single condtion with a car of his. As a young man graduate from university, he just began to work last year. Now it is a good time for him to make girlfriends. While as we know that there would be lots of inconvinience if my friend does not have a car. So a car would help him to find a good girl. Becasue this is the sincerence suggestion to my friend, this reminds me up a story of another friend of mine. Young lovers, no car, lots of fights on the buses, then they broke up. I do not want this story to come to my friend again. As the society is changing, lots of things changed, all we have to do is to up to them.

Finally, it is a lot of money to buy a car in my country, thus if my friend want to put all the money on travelling, maybe he would write another novel of the trip of the world in eighty days. Truley if he spent all the money to go on a vacation, he would go to lots of conutries to run all the money out. I think it is unneccesary for him to do so, as I said, we also could travel by the car he buy.

In all, compared with the plan of travelling, I suggest my friend to buy a car instead. Because he really needs a car as I discussed above. Besides, travelling by the car of his own is also a big fun.

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Average: 7 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 1, Rule ID: IT_IS[17]
Message: Did you mean 'it's' (='it is') instead of 'its' (possessive pronoun)?
Suggestion: It's; It is
Its my pleasure t ogive advice to my friend...
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Line 1, column 290, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[3]
Message: The pronoun 'he' must be used with a third-person verb: 'wants'.
Suggestion: wants
...e a trip to the Antractica if he really want to. So I will offer the reasons of my a...
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Line 3, column 101, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , more
...e. Due to the development of the society,more and more people have cars. It is almost...
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Line 3, column 185, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Now
...t a basical requirment foro us to drive.Now it is the time for my friend to upgrade...
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Line 3, column 370, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: What's
...e, we will travell together by driving. Whats more, I would have the chance of drinki...
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Line 5, column 317, Rule ID: HELP_TO_FIND[1]
Message: This phrase is probably grammatically incorrect. Write 'help him find' instead.
Suggestion: help him find
...end does not have a car. So a car would help him to find a good girl. Becasue this is the sincer...
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Line 7, column 397, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'he' must be used with a third-person verb: 'buys'.
Suggestion: buys
...aid, we also could travel by the car he buy. In all, compared with the plan of t...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, finally, if, may, really, so, still, then, thus, while, as for, i think, to begin with

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 9.8082437276 163% => OK
Conjunction : 2.0 13.8261648746 14% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 3.0 11.0286738351 27% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 71.0 43.0788530466 165% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 75.0 52.1666666667 144% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1819.0 1977.66487455 92% => OK
No of words: 463.0 407.700716846 114% => OK
Chars per words: 3.92872570194 4.8611393121 81% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.63868890866 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.30400827129 2.67179642975 86% => OK
Unique words: 209.0 212.727598566 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.451403887689 0.524837075471 86% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 582.3 618.680645161 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.51630824373 86% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 17.0 9.59856630824 177% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 11.0 3.51792114695 313% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 26.0 20.6003584229 126% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 32.7962149642 48.9658058833 67% => OK
Chars per sentence: 69.9615384615 100.406767564 70% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.8076923077 20.6045352989 86% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.88461538462 5.45110844103 71% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.5376344086 126% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 17.0 11.8709677419 143% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.190272151838 0.236089414692 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0628525356537 0.076458572812 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0606621257025 0.0737576698707 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.128774368852 0.150856017488 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0243918768033 0.0645574589148 38% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 6.0 11.7677419355 51% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 79.6 58.1214874552 137% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.4 10.1575268817 63% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 5.22 10.9000537634 48% => Coleman_liau_index is low.
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.66 8.01818996416 83% => OK
difficult_words: 64.0 86.8835125448 74% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 7.0 10.247311828 68% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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