In general, people are living longer now. Discuss the causes of this phenomenon. Use specific reasons and details to develop your essay (version two).
I agree with the claim that the people live longer now in comparison to the past. Advanced technology and science help people have better working conditions and survive from most diseases. I will explore these reasons in details in the following essay.
First of all, thanks to having much progress in medical science and technology, nowadays more diseases are curable compared to the past. There are many tragedies in the history which show that most of the people died because of lack of any cure. For example, there were many cities, which their population died totally because of the plague in the past. But, nowadays, those illnesses are somehow curable and abolished. Moreover, not only the medicians and researchers work hard to conquer most of the diseases, but also they try to make vaccines for them, leading to stop people to have this kind of illnesses. In other words, they are trying hard to protect people rather than curing us.
Additionally, today, the conditions of working are better than the past. I can remember that in all history books, it is mentioned that many women died in industrial age, just because they worked in some factories like cotton factories which has many pollution and chemical in the air which was extremely harmful for the body. And many young women died in the young age just because they had to work in this harmfull conditons. Moreover, in the past, most of the jobs was really hard and it hurts people during performing them. But, today human have many different vehicle and apparatus which do the arduous and mundane works and people are not obliged to do them personally. They just need to control those machines. Therefore, people do less harmful and hard work, and physically injured less, which help them live longer.
On the other hand, it worths to say that, technology did not help people in most cases such as the huge amount of air pollution in the air which are from a vast number of cars and also big industries. This pollution is most noticeable in the big cities and because of this, people living in big cities have more mental and health problems. Although this claim is true, the technology will find a way to deal with this problem too. For example, in some cities in Sweden, new technologies are used, therefore, the amount of pollution is very low in those cities which couldn’t hurt any people, animals or plants.
In conclusion, thanks to huge advancement in the works and the conditions of working and also great progress in medicine, nowadays, people are able to have longer life spans nowadays.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 246, Rule ID: MANY_NN_U[2]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun pollution seems to be uncountable; consider using: 'much pollution', 'a good deal of pollution'.
Suggestion: much pollution; a good deal of pollution
...ctories like cotton factories which has many pollution and chemical in the air which was extre...
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Line 3, column 550, Rule ID: NUMEROUS_DIFFERENT[1]
Message: Use simply 'many'.
Suggestion: many
... performing them. But, today human have many different vehicle and apparatus which do the ardu...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, moreover, really, so, therefore, for example, in conclusion, kind of, such as, first of all, in most cases, in other words, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 20.0 13.8261648746 145% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 32.0 43.0788530466 74% => OK
Preposition: 65.0 52.1666666667 125% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2134.0 1977.66487455 108% => OK
No of words: 442.0 407.700716846 108% => OK
Chars per words: 4.82805429864 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.58517132086 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.42910155965 2.67179642975 91% => OK
Unique words: 214.0 212.727598566 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.484162895928 0.524837075471 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 658.8 618.680645161 106% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 53.0517652479 48.9658058833 108% => OK
Chars per sentence: 101.619047619 100.406767564 101% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.0476190476 20.6045352989 102% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.7619047619 5.45110844103 142% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 11.0 3.85842293907 285% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.124375128856 0.236089414692 53% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0453463227706 0.076458572812 59% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0522159715898 0.0737576698707 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0883222041558 0.150856017488 59% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.060896898244 0.0645574589148 94% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.8 11.7677419355 100% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 58.1214874552 101% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.73 10.9000537634 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.61 8.01818996416 95% => OK
difficult_words: 82.0 86.8835125448 94% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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