Governments should spend more money in support of the arts than in support of athletics such as state-sponsored oplympic teams.
Sports and arts both have always been among the most important things that each government should support. However, today, authorities wonder whether they should support athletics more or arts. In my opinion, it would be better if governments spend more money on state-sponsored Olympic teams because success in a big competition like Olympic would encourage lots of people to do sports. Moreover, nowadays, Olympic becomes a symbol of power among different countries. Thus, success in such a competition is important for all governments. I will illustrate my reasons in the following paragraphs.
First, success in a competition like the Olympic would encourage a lot of young people to do sports. In other words, success in Olympic would bring a huge sense of pride and happiness to the society that leads young people to do more sports. For example, 5 years ago, Iran national volleyball team succeeded to finish the Olympic games in fourth place. Actually, it was the most important title that our national volleyball team has been gained ever. As a result, all people were happy about their results and the main issue of every discussion even the country’s authorities was about volleyball. Consequently, lots of teenagers and youngs became interested to do volleyball as entertainment. Also, a lot of volleyball pitches were built for them by the government.
Second, today, Olympic is a symbol of power among different countries. In other words, Olympic is a tournament in which all countries of the world compete with each other in several sports fields to show others their abilities and how powerful they are. For example, if you look to the history of the Olympic's champions, you can easily realize that every time the most developed countries of the world like China, USA, Russia, Japan, etc could achieve the most titles even if their population is less than other countries like India. Thus, being a symbol of power, countries are trying to do everything to increase their rank for the next period. For sure, allocating more money to them is one of the best ways to help Olympic teams to push them toward success in the game.
Based on the aforementioned reasons, it can be concluded that spending more money on sports teams would better than the arts.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, consequently, first, however, if, look, moreover, second, so, thus, for example, as a result, in my opinion, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 13.8261648746 43% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.0286738351 54% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 23.0 43.0788530466 53% => OK
Preposition: 53.0 52.1666666667 102% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1901.0 1977.66487455 96% => OK
No of words: 377.0 407.700716846 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.0424403183 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.4064143971 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.74314676636 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Unique words: 193.0 212.727598566 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.511936339523 0.524837075471 98% => OK
syllable_count: 576.9 618.680645161 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 52.2507273074 48.9658058833 107% => OK
Chars per sentence: 100.052631579 100.406767564 100% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.8421052632 20.6045352989 96% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.31578947368 5.45110844103 134% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.151977082233 0.236089414692 64% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0466096246099 0.076458572812 61% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0738409127904 0.0737576698707 100% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.118606411782 0.150856017488 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.111212819562 0.0645574589148 172% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.2 11.7677419355 104% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 58.1214874552 104% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.95 10.9000537634 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.64 8.01818996416 95% => OK
difficult_words: 73.0 86.8835125448 84% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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