If you could invent something new, what product would you develop?use specific details to explain why this invention is needed
use specific reasons and examples to support your opinion.
It is incontrovertibly axiomatic that water is the fundamental element of life on this planet. Without this incredible material, everything will be gone and this life that we know will be eradicated. As time passes, our planet becomes more populated, and this means that more water is needed to supply these people. Unfortunately, potable water on earth is limited, and the sources of water are declining every day. Therefore, if I could invent something new to help people, I would devise the machine to refine and treat used water and even sewage. By designing such mechanism, many of the problems and challenges on earth would be solved. By doing so, the environment will be much safer and healthier and people will have a better life.
As far as we know, the only way to attain water is from natural sources like underground waters. For using these waters, we should build wells deep enough to reach water levels and pump them out. Because our usage is usually more than the precipitation, the used water cannot be replaced. Hence, the level of water will decrease and sometimes those water sources will disappear. The other effect is that when the aquifer is gone, the soil of that area will become weak and might result in land subsidences, which can have catastrophic consequences. Also, for supplying water for cities, we should construct dams on major rivers. This usually causes severe changes in the environment and climate. For example, it increases the temperature of the whole region and increases the level of humidity which can make the condition unbearable to live in. But, by inventing this machine, all of these problems will be averted. We will not be forced to widely use groundwaters anymore and we can make fewer dams. By treating our wastewater, it is like having an endless source of water. Therefore, our environment will be more hospitable and much safer.
Second, the lack of sufficient natural water resources causes quite a lot of suffering for people all over the world. People are migrating from their homelands, because their water resources have declined, and they are unable to live there anymore. Also, in many cities, natural water is not very clean, and the governments are incapable of treating the water. Therefore, those people, especially poor people have to use that unhealthy water, which can cause serious and contagious diseases. But, if such a device for treating water was available, people could stay at their homelands. They could use clean water for drinking and their other needs. There would be less contention among the countries about making dams on international rivers.
In conclusion, I believe that making an apparatus to clean and treat the water will be one of the greatest inventions throughout the history of mankind. It will extremely help the environment and keep it intact. It also helps people around the world to live more serene and prosperous. Even though I know it is a dream, but I hope someone soon can devise such a machine.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, hence, if, second, so, therefore, well, for example, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 26.0 15.1003584229 172% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 27.0 9.8082437276 275% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 23.0 13.8261648746 166% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 47.0 43.0788530466 109% => OK
Preposition: 51.0 52.1666666667 98% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2500.0 1977.66487455 126% => OK
No of words: 504.0 407.700716846 124% => OK
Chars per words: 4.96031746032 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.73813722054 4.48103885553 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.65415384405 2.67179642975 99% => OK
Unique words: 252.0 212.727598566 118% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.5 0.524837075471 95% => OK
syllable_count: 796.5 618.680645161 129% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 15.0 9.59856630824 156% => OK
Article: 7.0 3.08781362007 227% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 7.0 3.51792114695 199% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 30.0 20.6003584229 146% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 27.4757266611 48.9658058833 56% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 83.3333333333 100.406767564 83% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.8 20.6045352989 82% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.56666666667 5.45110844103 47% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 3.85842293907 233% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.88709677419 184% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0878685696906 0.236089414692 37% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0290492755237 0.076458572812 38% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0437953151606 0.0737576698707 59% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0609436456972 0.150856017488 40% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0326571194572 0.0645574589148 51% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.3 11.7677419355 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 55.24 58.1214874552 95% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.19 10.9000537634 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.28 8.01818996416 103% => OK
difficult_words: 123.0 86.8835125448 142% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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