Jeremy Lin is would be a great option if I had a chance to meet him. He rose to stardom in less than a week, and has been through extreme highs and lows. Therefore, it would be an extreme pleasure to meet such a prolific and inspirational figure.
Due to shortcomings in his body and his race, he was undrafted out of Harvard despite being one of the best players. He wondered whether it was a wise choice for him to remain as a basketball player. He was later picked up, but was provided with little playing time. He was cut after a season, and after a brief stint with another team, he was ready for quitting. The New York Knicks picked him up, with most of their major players injured. On the last game of his contract then, he was subbed in with their best players underperforming. He seized the opportunity and led his team to victory with an astonishing performance. He was then extended, and while provided with more chances in the middle of the season, he caught fire and became a household name. He led his team to a long winning streak despite playing without their major pieces. Unfortunately, though, his season was cut short due to an injury.
He had inglorious years, losing his starting spot to teammates and bouncing around teams. He had a couple promising years and acquired a multiyear deal, but injuries plagued his later days. Luckily for him, he managed to earn a ring with the Raptors in his last campaign in the NBA. He wasn’t offered a contract so he went to China, and had an All-star season there. He attempted to stage a comeback to the NBA, registering great statistics in a G-League stint, yet remained unsigned.
In spite of his short term success, he had a profound impact on people across the globe. He was disrespected on his way due to his race even though being the best in the world. He overcame extreme adversity in the harshest stages of his career and was capable of fighting back. He had a great work ethic, and was respected by his successors. In the basketball world, he may be overlooked, but in my mind, he will forever be remembered as a legend.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
... was provided with little playing time. He was cut after a season, and after a bri...
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Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...aught fire and became a household name. He led his team to a long winning streak d...
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Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...areer and was capable of fighting back. He had a great work ethic, and was respect...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, look, may, so, then, therefore, while, in spite of
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 15.1003584229 132% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 13.8261648746 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 0.0 11.0286738351 0% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 48.0 43.0788530466 111% => OK
Preposition: 54.0 52.1666666667 104% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 8.0752688172 12% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1718.0 1977.66487455 87% => OK
No of words: 381.0 407.700716846 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.50918635171 4.8611393121 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.41805628031 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.60887371425 2.67179642975 98% => OK
Unique words: 204.0 212.727598566 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.535433070866 0.524837075471 102% => OK
syllable_count: 518.4 618.680645161 84% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 24.0 9.59856630824 250% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.51792114695 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 9.0 1.86738351254 482% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 16.6454180869 48.9658058833 34% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 74.6956521739 100.406767564 74% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.5652173913 20.6045352989 80% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.5652173913 5.45110844103 47% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.85842293907 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0395303130688 0.236089414692 17% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0182712970987 0.076458572812 24% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0377025914377 0.0737576698707 51% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0446416642714 0.150856017488 30% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0519219263033 0.0645574589148 80% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.1 11.7677419355 69% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 72.16 58.1214874552 124% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.2 10.1575268817 71% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.58 10.9000537634 79% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.62 8.01818996416 95% => OK
difficult_words: 77.0 86.8835125448 89% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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