Imagine that you are planning to take a vacation and are trying to
decide between two places to visit. Which of these two options do you
believe would give you better information about making your choice?
Why?
1 Reading about the places online
2 Discussing them with someone you know who has visited both places
Nowadays people tend to travel more and explore different places of earth. There are so many amazing place for traveling which would make difficult for people to decide which place to go. Fortunately , there are so many reliable ways to get information about places, like reading online in website and social media or asking directly from people who had visited places before. Some people believe that reading online is the best way to compare places, but other may have a different idea. personally I believe that asking people to give me information is better. I feel this way for two main reasons, which I explore in the following essay.
First, online media usually does not give you correct and accurate information about places. Mostly they show the advantages and beauty of a place and somehow you can not see about the danger or disadvantages of it on online sources. For example, about a years ago, me and my family decided to take a trip to Turkey, one of the most beautiful county in Asia with amazing beaches and huge stores. there are two city in this county that contains most of its tourists, which are Istanbul and Antalya. so we were not sure to go to which city. I started to search about these places on website on internet like booking. there were lots of beautiful pictures of stores, restaurant and clean and clear beaches of Istanbul, which I could not find these stuff about Antalya. so we decided to go to Istanbul. Surprisingly, when we received there, there was no sign of beach and stores and when I asked the manager of the hotels about it, she told me that there are some beaches and store in Istanbul, but thery are not located in the center and in order to go there, we had to travel more that four hours.
Second, people who had been in both places can give you more useful advice due to the fact that they had been there and had better scenes of it. additonaly every body agree that these kind of information will not be accessible by online sources. based on my experience of traveling to Istanbul, I got lots of useful and valuable knowledge about this city. I remember that, one of my friend wanted to travel to Istanbul, immediately after me. she started to search about the weather, beautiful places and native people in order to be ready. beside, she asked me about it and want me to help her. for example, she read on the internet that people in Istanbul are very welcoming and give turist free drinks which was not true at all. by using my experience, she was able to pick her mind and made a better decision.
in sum, I love traveling a lot and really want to go and visit different countries and places. in order ro make a rational decision to choose which place to go it is better to ask people who had been in both place before, because not all of the information on internet are tube and using people's experience is the best way to get informed about differen aspects of a place.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, may, really, second, so, for example, i feel, kind of
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 15.1003584229 146% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 28.0 13.8261648746 203% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 22.0 11.0286738351 199% => OK
Pronoun: 56.0 43.0788530466 130% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 85.0 52.1666666667 163% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2398.0 1977.66487455 121% => OK
No of words: 531.0 407.700716846 130% => OK
Chars per words: 4.51600753296 4.8611393121 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.80035803286 4.48103885553 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.3567980705 2.67179642975 88% => OK
Unique words: 238.0 212.727598566 112% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.448210922787 0.524837075471 85% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 794.7 618.680645161 128% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.6003584229 121% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 62.1123626986 48.9658058833 127% => OK
Chars per sentence: 95.92 100.406767564 96% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.24 20.6045352989 103% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.76 5.45110844103 51% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 23.0 5.5376344086 415% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 18.0 11.8709677419 152% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.259373595405 0.236089414692 110% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0767244543686 0.076458572812 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0530502196199 0.0737576698707 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.173559280205 0.150856017488 115% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0201177528297 0.0645574589148 31% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.5 11.7677419355 89% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 58.1214874552 101% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.94 10.9000537634 82% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.21 8.01818996416 90% => OK
difficult_words: 85.0 86.8835125448 98% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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