It is better for elders to take risks and explore new things than young people.
In this rapidly changing world, there are new things happening around us each day. Many people believe that young people have less to lose and should take their chances when they can, while other think that older people have the time and money to explore without worrying about life. In my opinion, I think young people should explore the world while they can and not wait until they are old.
Young people are more open to accept new stuffs. They can enjoy following the latest trend, whereas old people always find them troublesome. To be more concise, when the new technology is invented in the world, it will change the life style. Such is surprising thing that old people cannot follow the trend, and have hard time to learn how to use new technology. Take cellphone as a compelling example. Young people can quickly learn the uses of app in mobile phones such as watching Youtube and playing games, but old people find it hard to use the latest functions of mobile phone, even though mobile is convenient to our life. Since young people are willing to learn new stuffs, they are better to explore new things than elders people.
Furthermore, young have more energy, so they are suitable to take risk and explore new things. The more new things are, the more energy they need to put in it. To be more specific, to explore new things is difficult, and is likely to take risk. If scientists aspire to explore new things, they must stay in lab for a long time to do experiment. Young researcher can stay up late or work overtime to study, which is often beyond the physical limits of the old. For instance, Graphene, a new amazing material, was invented by young scientific researcher. When they carried out this experiment, they spoke tremendous time on doing repeating work using tape to tear off graphene from Carbon. This experiment process was laborious and time consuming, so young research was better to do this than the old people.
In conclusion, I am of the opinion that it is promising that young people to explore new stuffs. This is because they are more willing to accept new things, such as new technology, and because they are energetic.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 7, column 44, Rule ID: PROGRESSIVE_VERBS[1]
Message: This verb is normally not used in the progressive form. Try a simple form instead.
...conclusion, I am of the opinion that it is promising that young people to explore new stuffs...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, furthermore, if, so, whereas, while, for instance, i think, in conclusion, such as, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 15.1003584229 146% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 33.0 43.0788530466 77% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 52.1666666667 86% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1788.0 1977.66487455 90% => OK
No of words: 379.0 407.700716846 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.71767810026 4.8611393121 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.41224685777 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.32138696665 2.67179642975 87% => OK
Unique words: 188.0 212.727598566 88% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.496042216359 0.524837075471 95% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 546.3 618.680645161 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.3890021114 48.9658058833 87% => OK
Chars per sentence: 89.4 100.406767564 89% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.95 20.6045352989 92% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.1 5.45110844103 94% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.432365829949 0.236089414692 183% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.148143864936 0.076458572812 194% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.114534162414 0.0737576698707 155% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.264606847682 0.150856017488 175% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.055150070713 0.0645574589148 85% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.3 11.7677419355 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 70.13 58.1214874552 121% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.9 10.1575268817 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.1 10.9000537634 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.32 8.01818996416 91% => OK
difficult_words: 67.0 86.8835125448 77% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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