Getting advice from older friends is more valuable than from the friends of the same age as yours.
Advice, an essential element in life, has been valued and even triggers a heated discussion over whether older friends can offer more valuable advice to people than friends of the same age do. Getting advice from friends of similar age, in some people’s views, is preferable. Contrary to these people’s opinions is my perspective that seeking advice from old friends is superior, due to the contribution to personal life and career development.
What must be prioritized is that older friends, rather than friends of similar age, can give us helpful advice about personal life, including diet and stress-eliminating approaches. To begin with, it is the elder friends whose advice about diet is beneficial to people. To be more concise, elderly friends can give people sound advice like eating organic food, whole-grain food, and whole-fiber food, since they lead a wholesome lifestyle; on the other hand, leading an unwholesome lifestyle, friends of similar age cannot offer people advice about food, and even give wrong advice, such as eating sugared soda, chocolate, and dairy products. Furthermore, people can seek advice about how to reduce stress from elderly friends. In detail, older friends, compared with friends of similar age, know numerous stress-shrinking strategies like doing Tai Chi, going hiking, and going jogging, helping people lower stress levels; by contrast, pressure cannot be reduced after people seek advice from friends of the same age, because these friends usually lead a hectic lifestyle and cannot exclude themselves from daily worries and concerns as well.
What is equally worth discussing is that people can get professional advice about career development from older friends, rather than from similar-age friends, including how to secure employment and increase the chances of promotion in career. First of all, elder friends offer people helpful advice about searching for jobs. Specifically, they can teach people how to wear formal attires and convince interviewers, thus allowing people to create a positive impression on interviewers; on the contrary, getting advice about finding jobs from friends of similar age is extremely difficult because they either lack experience or have hard time securing a job. Moreover, never can we ignore that elder friends can give advice about how to increase the chances of promotion in the workplace. To explain it further, their advice will help people earn respect and admiration and win the support and assistance from colleagues, even enabling people to move up the promotion ladder, because elderly friends know how to communicate with different types of workers; in contrast, with similar-age friends lacking communication skill, people cannot get such advice from them.
Personal life, an essential element, will be improved through the advice older friends give. Career development, the foundation for people’s lives, will be facilitated after people ask elderly friends for advice. In conclusion, only through older friends can people get practical advice.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...riends can people get practical advice.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, furthermore, if, moreover, so, thus, well, in conclusion, in contrast, such as, first of all, on the contrary, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 17.0 9.8082437276 173% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.0286738351 45% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 17.0 43.0788530466 39% => OK
Preposition: 68.0 52.1666666667 130% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 8.0752688172 186% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2589.0 1977.66487455 131% => OK
No of words: 470.0 407.700716846 115% => OK
Chars per words: 5.5085106383 4.8611393121 113% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.65612321451 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.72548540828 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Unique words: 230.0 212.727598566 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.489361702128 0.524837075471 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 790.2 618.680645161 128% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 9.59856630824 31% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 12.0 4.94265232975 243% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 29.0 20.1344086022 144% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 116.482680445 48.9658058833 238% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 161.8125 100.406767564 161% => OK
Words per sentence: 29.375 20.6045352989 143% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.6875 5.45110844103 178% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 11.8709677419 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.88709677419 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.431325044993 0.236089414692 183% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.187319096468 0.076458572812 245% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0862846893897 0.0737576698707 117% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.322293388357 0.150856017488 214% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.104885574948 0.0645574589148 162% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 19.2 11.7677419355 163% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 33.58 58.1214874552 58% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.8 10.1575268817 156% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.27 10.9000537634 140% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.14 8.01818996416 114% => OK
difficult_words: 121.0 86.8835125448 139% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 10.002688172 140% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.6 10.0537634409 135% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.247311828 137% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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