Everybody has their own criteria for measuring their suitable job. While some people may believe the salary is more important than job security, I disagree. From my prespective, job security is prior to the salary and no one should trade the a secure job with low pay for a high pay job with less security. I elaborate on my viewpoint through two main reasons in the following paragraphs.
First of all, having a steady salary you can better plan for the future of your own and your children’s. Not knowing when you might lose your job even with a high salary you can not have any long term plans. It is correct that with low payment it will take you more time to reach what you always wanted but the job security, which comes with it, can guarantee the journey for you. For instance, a person who have the dream of traveling around the world and getting to visite as many countries as possible, need to save up for a long time to make their dream come true and it is only possible by a secure job and a steady payment. Or consider parents who want to help their children with their collage or university fees and let them worry only about their education. They can make it possible with a secure job better than a high risk job with high salary.
On the other hand, a person with less secure job is always going to feel stressed and worried, wondering when the time will come for them to be jobless with no income. However, the high salary is tempting. People with such jobs, not only will always be fearful of their future, but also cannot enjoy the money they are receiving because they know it can be cut off any time in the near future. Conversly, someone with a more secure job can enjoy their life better as if they know nothing can take away their career from them, despite the fact that they have lower salary. In addition, with less mental pressure, they can be mentaly healthier and live a longer and happier life.
To sum up, all aformentioned reasons leads us to conclude that a less-paid but more secure job is better than a well-paid job with less security. Reasons like being able to plan for future and experiencing less stress contributes to the fact that job security is more important than job payment.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 239, Rule ID: DT_DT[1]
Message: Maybe you need to remove one determiner so that only 'the' or 'a' is left.
Suggestion: the; a
...r to the salary and no one should trade the a secure job with low pay for a high pay ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, may, so, well, while, for instance, in addition, first of all, to sum up, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 9.8082437276 163% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 42.0 43.0788530466 97% => OK
Preposition: 47.0 52.1666666667 90% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1832.0 1977.66487455 93% => OK
No of words: 407.0 407.700716846 100% => OK
Chars per words: 4.50122850123 4.8611393121 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.49157444576 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.31080264691 2.67179642975 86% => OK
Unique words: 197.0 212.727598566 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.484029484029 0.524837075471 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 576.9 618.680645161 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 50.7912479178 48.9658058833 104% => OK
Chars per sentence: 107.764705882 100.406767564 107% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.9411764706 20.6045352989 116% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.17647058824 5.45110844103 132% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.416013076905 0.236089414692 176% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.14546952966 0.076458572812 190% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.13093470957 0.0737576698707 178% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.272794502404 0.150856017488 181% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0606154410674 0.0645574589148 94% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.7 11.7677419355 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 65.05 58.1214874552 112% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.12 10.9000537634 84% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.3 8.01818996416 91% => OK
difficult_words: 65.0 86.8835125448 75% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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