It is important to improve our skills and knowledge as much as possible . Some people prefer to learn from individuals who have mpre experience than they doーlike teachers and supervisorー instead of learning from peers, like there colleagues and classmates. Do you think this is a good idea? Why or why not ?
Most people think learning from teachers or experienced person is the best way to learn. But i personally feel that learning with the help of the peers is better . I feel this for two reasons which I will explore in the following essay.
To begin with, the informal setting of studying with peers allows us to ask questions without hesitations. Due to some social norms , there are some topics that we consider imappropriate to discuss with our teachers despite it being on the syallbus but such barreirs are removed when we learn from our colleagues. To demonstrate this with my own example. Back in highschool when we were learning about human reproductive systems in biology class there was topic about condoms and sexual intercourse. Due to our culture those topics were considered wrong and we could not openly talk about it with the teacher because we thought they might judge us but In contrast, me and my classmates openly discussed about it during our lunch breaks because the setting was informal and there was noone to judge us. This demostartes how learning from collegues breaks the formality barrier .
In addition to that, learning with peers can be much entertaining compared to learning with professor which is really important for learning efficiently. When we learn from our professors or teachers they use examples which we can not relate to but our peers on the other hand share a similar intrest because of being from a same generation.For instance when I was in my college there was a topic about historical antiques and I really did not find the topic intresting because the professor was giving an example about some somalian antiques which I had no clue about and when I went to learn about the same topic with my peers they explained it to me with the example of the historical movie which we all recently went to watch it together and pointed out the the gems in the movie called yellow stones were a good examples of a antique . As a result of this I was fully able to understand the concept about the topic and also I enjoyed while learning just because of the fact that I could related to the concept.
To conclude, It is better to learn with peers than with professors because informal settings allows us to be more confident and allows us to learn while having fun because of the similarity in the ages
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, really, so, while, as to, for instance, i feel, in addition, in contrast, as a result, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 15.1003584229 132% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 53.0 43.0788530466 123% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 68.0 52.1666666667 130% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1932.0 1977.66487455 98% => OK
No of words: 409.0 407.700716846 100% => OK
Chars per words: 4.72371638142 4.8611393121 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.49708221141 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.56446758026 2.67179642975 96% => OK
Unique words: 192.0 212.727598566 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.469437652812 0.524837075471 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 595.8 618.680645161 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 9.59856630824 42% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 20.6003584229 63% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 31.0 20.1344086022 154% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 162.027830176 48.9658058833 331% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 148.615384615 100.406767564 148% => OK
Words per sentence: 31.4615384615 20.6045352989 153% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.0 5.45110844103 183% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 10.0 5.5376344086 181% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.193989676248 0.236089414692 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0875293871746 0.076458572812 114% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0665035290659 0.0737576698707 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.138089307678 0.150856017488 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0239015002315 0.0645574589148 37% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.5 11.7677419355 140% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.47 58.1214874552 83% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 10.1575268817 140% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.69 10.9000537634 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.11 8.01818996416 101% => OK
difficult_words: 76.0 86.8835125448 87% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.4 10.0537634409 143% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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