It is important to keep old friends than make new friends
Although it seems like a good idea to keep your old friends but not making new ones does not sound good to me. So, I disagree with the following statement that it is more important to keep your old friends than it is to make new friends. This is because of the following reasons.
First, I prefer making new friends because it helps me in gaining maturity. For example, my father was in government job and so he used to get transfers from one city to another. As a result, we had to move along with him. This made me change my schools frequently and initially I disliked it. As, this made me leave my old friends whom I liked very much and enjoyed their company. In childhood it is easy to feel emotional towards your friends and I wanted to stay faithful to my friends. So, making new friends felt like a betrayal of their emotions. This is because they may not like me making new friends as it may make them feel as if they are no more important to me. However, when I was left with no choice than to move with my father, I was forced to leave my old friends. This was initially very tormenting to me and I felt very lonely without my friends. However, when I was admitted in a new school, I began to interact with new classmates and gradully started to know them. This helped me in interacting with them and gradually friendship grew out of these interactions in a natural way. Slowly I began to like my new friends as much as I did my old friends. But the process repeated itself and my father got transfered again. However, next time I didn't feel as devastated as I was now begining to gain maturity and an understanding that there are always good people in the world. Old friends are always missed and can't be substituted but new friends always bring in some fresh energy and in the end I had more good friends both new and old as compared to my friends.
Second, I like to learn new things in life. Now I realize that making new friends has helped me so much in learning new things that I may not have done otherwise. This is because each of my friend has a unique quality, characteristic and an inclination towards exploring something that attracts them. Being with different friends have helped me to appreciate different arts, sciences, cultute, religions and food. Whenever I am with a friend I talk about something that we have in commong that have made us become friends and then we explore the common interest in detail. For example, some of my friends like Indian food, some like to go to the science museum, some like to learn dancing while some other like going to concerts. As a result I got a variety of exposure and learned so many different things that I may not have learned otherwise if I had only few friends. This has tremendously helped me in gaining more knowledge of the world and myself.
As a result, because of the above reasons and the richness my new friends added to my life experiences along with my old friends, I disagree with the above statement. I now firmly believe that keeping your old friends while making new ones is the best way a person can enjoy and explore this world.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Consider replacing "in a natural way" with adverb for "natural"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...iendship grew out of these interactions in a natural way. Slowly I began to like my new friends ...
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Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: didn't
... transfered again. However, next time I didnt feel as devastated as I was now beginin...
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Line 2, column 1427, Rule ID: CANT[1]
Message: Did you mean 'can't' or 'cannot'?
Suggestion: can't; cannot
...orld. Old friends are always missed and cant be substituted but new friends always b...
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Message: This verb is used with infinitive: 'to dance'.
Suggestion: to dance
... the science museum, some like to learn dancing while some other like going to concerts...
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Message: Use simply 'many'.
Suggestion: many
...ot a variety of exposure and learned so many different things that I may not have learned othe...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, however, if, may, second, so, then, while, as for, for example, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 22.0 13.8261648746 159% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 98.0 43.0788530466 227% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 72.0 52.1666666667 138% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2549.0 1977.66487455 129% => OK
No of words: 577.0 407.700716846 142% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.41767764298 4.8611393121 91% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.90110439584 4.48103885553 109% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.46926142128 2.67179642975 92% => OK
Unique words: 240.0 212.727598566 113% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.415944540728 0.524837075471 79% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 788.4 618.680645161 127% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 17.0 9.59856630824 177% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 8.0 3.51792114695 227% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 29.0 20.6003584229 141% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 38.016705759 48.9658058833 78% => OK
Chars per sentence: 87.8965517241 100.406767564 88% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.8965517241 20.6045352989 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.0 5.45110844103 55% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 22.0 11.8709677419 185% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.412069054349 0.236089414692 175% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.12972879468 0.076458572812 170% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.136423639844 0.0737576698707 185% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.325635899491 0.150856017488 216% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.109651325943 0.0645574589148 170% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.3 11.7677419355 79% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 69.11 58.1214874552 119% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.3 10.1575268817 82% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.36 10.9000537634 77% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.9 8.01818996416 86% => OK
difficult_words: 85.0 86.8835125448 98% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.0 10.002688172 60% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Write the essay in 30 minutes.
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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