It is important to know about events happening around the world, even if it is unlikely that
they will affect your daily life.
Over the past years, the issue of whether or not having information about events that happen around the world and these events do not have a direct influence on our life has received a great deal of attention from psychologists and sociologists. Although some may say that people should just know about events around them, and knowing about other events is not much more than a waste of time; I, as well as many others, believe that human life all around the world have a direct connection to each other, and ones need to be aware of events happening around the world.
First of all, an important reason why human needs to know about occurrence happening around the world is that human life has a direct connection to each other. Many psychologists believe that, in the modern era, countries have a direct influence on each other, and they must consider important events that happen in other countries. For example, in Iran, when the Bam’s earthquake happened, most countries started to help Iranian people to control the situations were exist. In this situation, if other countries and people did not help the Iranian people, they would not solve and control disaster conditions. So, humans had better know important events that happened around the world.
Another reason for this point of view is that countries are connecting together in most ways. Countries for increasing and flourishing their financial and sanitary conditions need to connect to other countries. They export their products to another country and imports goods they need; hence, they would know what happen to the world. Furthermore, poor countries demand to are supported by rich countries until they would solve their problems. In this situation, if people, who live in rich countries, do not have information about events that happen in poor countries, they would not help them for solving their problems.
Finally, it is occasionally said that it is crucial to know what is happening, even if it does not affect our daily lives because we could learn a lot from these events. Many Sociologists say that people around the world could use the experiences of others in different aspects. For example, people could see the long-term results of some political decisions of a country, and if it was good, act as the same as that country if not, avoid these policies. Consequently, being
aware of different events around the world could be very important.
To sum up, considering the ideas presented in the paragraphs above, I personally believe that it is important to know about events happening around the world, even if it is unlikely that they will affect our daily lives chiefly due to precious lessons we could learn from them and the importance of helping each other as well as the long-term effects of the events.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 35, Rule ID: WHETHER[7]
Message: Perhaps you can shorten this phrase to just 'whether'. It is correct though if you mean 'regardless of whether'.
Suggestion: whether
Over the past years, the issue of whether or not having information about events that ha...
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Line 6, column 469, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'existed'.
Suggestion: existed
...n people to control the situations were exist. In this situation, if other countries ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
consequently, finally, first, furthermore, hence, if, may, so, well, for example, as well as, first of all, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 9.8082437276 163% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.0286738351 145% => OK
Pronoun: 47.0 43.0788530466 109% => OK
Preposition: 65.0 52.1666666667 125% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.0752688172 136% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2348.0 1977.66487455 119% => OK
No of words: 470.0 407.700716846 115% => OK
Chars per words: 4.99574468085 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.65612321451 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.55912431266 2.67179642975 96% => OK
Unique words: 211.0 212.727598566 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.448936170213 0.524837075471 86% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 691.2 618.680645161 112% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.51792114695 199% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 27.0 20.1344086022 134% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 77.6390815867 48.9658058833 159% => OK
Chars per sentence: 138.117647059 100.406767564 138% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.6470588235 20.6045352989 134% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.88235294118 5.45110844103 126% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.53405017921 132% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.420511829861 0.236089414692 178% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.139208265823 0.076458572812 182% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.12415165132 0.0737576698707 168% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.231306899522 0.150856017488 153% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.105070283166 0.0645574589148 163% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.9 11.7677419355 135% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.53 58.1214874552 90% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.6 10.1575268817 124% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.02 10.9000537634 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.97 8.01818996416 99% => OK
difficult_words: 89.0 86.8835125448 102% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 27.0 10.002688172 270% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.0537634409 127% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.