As the scale of city area increasingly enlarge, people must take long time in traffic, whatever by public transportation or by car. My friend Jack, always complain to me that he need to take 1-hour subway to corporation, which is intolerable. Thus, many workers suggest the government to improve the city's public transportation, such as subway, bus, and taxi, in order to shorten their time of commute. I, however, insist that the improvement of Internet access is been urgently needed.
Firstly, the improvement of Internet access can empower us in our working aspect. To begin with, the Internet can make my work be efficiency. As a software engineer, I need to code a project with others at the same time, we need Internet access to finish our work, or we must code and check by ourselves. Besides, many companies, such as Apple and Google, have claimed that their employees can work from home during the COVID-19. So, with the Internet access, employees can decide where they will work in. What is more, if the company do not allow me work from home, and my commute time is long, I can watch movies or listen to music during the commute time. Even I can open my laptop, starting my office time anywhere. On the contrary, even if the public transportation is improved, and my commute time is shortened, I can not do anything without Internet.
Secondly, we can improve our life quality through the development of Internet. If I want to play video games with my friends, I can get in touch with them by telegram online, then play together online, too. Without gathering my friends to my house, I can freely and conveniently do anything that I want online. Also, I can save my time through the Online service. Take myself as an example. Once I decided to look for a cleaner to clean my house. However, I lived in a small town and there only one agency that can help me to looking for such service. I took several hours to drive to the agency but they told to me that all I need to do was to open my browser and fill in my information in their platform. I learned that I could take many services online, and I always asks for food delivery online. I save my time for exercising, which improves my fitness.
In conclusion, with the Internet access, we can make our work more efficacy, improve our life quality. Also, we can solve the problem that we can not stand the boring during our commute time. Given that there is not any cellular data available in many rural area and subway, Internet access is in highly needed.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 466, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'been'.
Suggestion: been
...t the improvement of Internet access is be urgently needed. Firstly, the improv...
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Line 3, column 313, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun company seems to be countable; consider using: 'many companies'.
Suggestion: many companies
...t code and check by ourselves. Besides, many company, such as Apple and Google, have claimed...
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Line 3, column 503, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: What's
...ees can decide where they will work in. Whats more, if the company dont allow me work...
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Line 3, column 530, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...ill work in. Whats more, if the company dont allow me work from home, and my commute...
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Line 3, column 634, Rule ID: A_INFINITVE[1]
Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
... watch movies or listen to music during the commute time. Even I can open my laptop, starti...
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Line 5, column 730, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'can' requires the base form of the verb: 'take'
Suggestion: take
...in their platform. I learned that I can took many services online, and I always asks...
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Line 5, column 770, Rule ID: NON3PRS_VERB[1]
Message: The pronoun 'I' must be used with a non-third-person form of a verb: 'ask'
Suggestion: ask
...took many services online, and I always asks for food delivery online. I save my tim...
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Line 5, column 801, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...I always asks for food delivery online. I save my time for exercising, which impr...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, first, firstly, however, if, look, second, secondly, so, then, thus, as to, in conclusion, such as, on the contrary, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 23.0 9.8082437276 234% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 67.0 43.0788530466 156% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 57.0 52.1666666667 109% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2067.0 1977.66487455 105% => OK
No of words: 450.0 407.700716846 110% => OK
Chars per words: 4.59333333333 4.8611393121 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.6057793516 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.54929184067 2.67179642975 95% => OK
Unique words: 221.0 212.727598566 104% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.491111111111 0.524837075471 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 665.1 618.680645161 108% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 15.0 9.59856630824 156% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.6003584229 121% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 36.7314579074 48.9658058833 75% => OK
Chars per sentence: 82.68 100.406767564 82% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.0 20.6045352989 87% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.0 5.45110844103 110% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.5376344086 144% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 10.0 4.88709677419 205% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.181866039415 0.236089414692 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0654689494198 0.076458572812 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0702903521455 0.0737576698707 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.135322197367 0.150856017488 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0425267898548 0.0645574589148 66% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.2 11.7677419355 78% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 58.1214874552 106% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.05 10.9000537634 83% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.86 8.01818996416 98% => OK
difficult_words: 95.0 86.8835125448 109% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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