Stating that it is more important to keep your old friends than it is to make new friends, the speaker asserts that maintenance relationships with old friends is more beneficial than making new friends. Of course, it is undeniable that old friends are important our life because they can give a valuable advice with deeply understandings about us. From my viewpoint, however, only emphasizing the merit of keeping old friends, the speaker ignores several advantages of making a relationship with new people.
To begin, in general, common sense tells us that several experiences to meet new people and make new friends are valuable to a successful life of anyone who is a member of a society. When it comes to modern society where there is no task can be done by a single person, those experiences are valuable because it plays a vital role in the improvement of social skills, which are necessary qualifications to modern people. For instance, my father’s, an engineering researcher with 40 years’ experience, he informed us that when he started his career, he had problems in communications with his coworkers and boss, and it had a severe negative influence on doing his task. Thus, he recognized the importance of making relationships with new people in his workplace, he tried to make new friends at his workplace and it resulted to improve his social skills, thus he solved the problems. This example shows us that making new friends is more necessary thing than maintaining old friends because it can help us develop social skills.
Further, there is another merit of making new friends that it allows us enlarge our horizons. With regard to students who have naïve and shorted sight, through making new friends, they can learn many things which plays a vital role in expanding their horizons because the new friends have diversified interesting issues and knowledge. In other wise, only focusing a relationship with old friends, it is able to prevent them from having well-grounded knowledge caused by their naïve sights. My personal experience can be a reliable evidence to prove this my view. When I was a university student, a mechanical engineering student, I had to decide detailed majors between diversified several areas in mechanical engineering such as thermal dynamics, material dynamics, or electronic dynamics. At this time, I was not insightful and did not have well-grounded knowledge about these areas, thus I asked students who had same major with me to get information about the majors. In this process, I made many friends and it made me enlarge my horizon and I was able to select my detailed major correctly. This example reveals that making new friends helps us providing a chance to improve our horizons.
To sum, despite of the merit of keeping old friends, both the importance of social skills to succeed for modern people and the advantage to enlarge our horizons caused by new friends tell us that having new friends are advantageous. Thus, I cannot fully agree the concept that keeping old friends has more advantages than making new friends has.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 294, Rule ID: A_UNCOUNTABLE[3]
Message: Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply 'valuable advice'.
Suggestion: valuable advice
...mportant our life because they can give a valuable advice with deeply understandings about us. Fr...
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Line 3, column 339, Rule ID: OTHER_WISE_OTHERWISE[1]
Message: Did you mean 'otherwise'?
Suggestion: otherwise
...ed interesting issues and knowledge. In other wise, only focusing a relationship with old ...
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Line 3, column 1152, Rule ID: ADVISE_VBG[9]
Message: The verb 'help' is used with infinitive: 'to provide' or 'provide'.
Suggestion: to provide; provide
...eveals that making new friends helps us providing a chance to improve our horizons. To s...
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Discourse Markers used:
['however', 'if', 'so', 'thus', 'well', 'for instance', 'in general', 'of course', 'such as', 'with regard to']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.213660245184 0.229887763892 93% => OK
Verbs: 0.173380035026 0.158761421928 109% => OK
Adjectives: 0.133099824869 0.0866891130778 154% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0262697022767 0.046263068375 57% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0980735551664 0.0685040099705 143% => Less pronouns wanted. Try not to use 'you, I, they, he...' as the subject of a sentence
Prepositions: 0.108581436077 0.118717715034 91% => OK
Participles: 0.045534150613 0.0351676179071 129% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.8605399299 2.67179642975 107% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0332749562172 0.0309702414327 107% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.00188951952338 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.0647985989492 0.0887237588012 73% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0105078809107 0.0209618222197 50% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.015761821366 0.0139019557991 113% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 3097.0 2387.08602151 130% => OK
No of words: 513.0 408.028673835 126% => OK
Chars per words: 6.03703703704 5.86048508987 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.75914943092 4.48200974243 106% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.391812865497 0.338922669872 116% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.304093567251 0.251872472559 121% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.185185185185 0.174417080927 106% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.124756335283 0.112833075102 111% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.8605399299 2.67179642975 107% => OK
Unique words: 231.0 212.727598566 109% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.450292397661 0.524397521467 86% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
Word variations: 51.8645602727 59.2087087015 88% => OK
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6684587814 87% => OK
Sentence length: 28.5 20.5533526081 139% => OK
Sentence length SD: 55.3636964887 48.84282405 113% => OK
Chars per sentence: 172.055555556 120.699889404 143% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.5 20.5533526081 139% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.555555555556 0.644075263715 86% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.5376344086 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.54480286738 54% => OK
Readability: 58.9093567251 45.7405998639 129% => OK
Elegance: 1.23529411765 1.45489161554 85% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.491886994194 0.300154397459 164% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.149388602045 0.103427244359 144% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0955082153536 0.0752933317313 127% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.503677271656 0.497263757937 101% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.152874729222 0.151897553556 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.197704513951 0.114077575197 173% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.164715983093 0.0781384742642 211% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.363931642286 0.336927656856 108% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0316576692119 0.067059652881 47% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.370343413326 0.210909579961 176% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.126154594985 0.0618886996521 204% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8870967742 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.86379928315 26% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.91756272401 41% => OK
Positive topic words: 13.0 8.42114695341 154% => OK
Negative topic words: 0.0 2.4623655914 0% => More negative topic words wanted.
Neutral topic words: 1.0 2.75985663082 36% => OK
Total topic words: 14.0 13.6433691756 103% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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