Is it more important to work hard many hours and support your family well, or spend more hours with your family and build good relationships?
Some people think that parent’s role are to work more hours to support their children financially. They think money will make their children happy in their lives. Although I understand their point of view, I have a different opinion. I believe that spending more time and building stronger relationships with my children are more important. The basis of my view is educational, social and personal.
From the educational perspective, children need their mom’s support specificlly at younger age. Children in school are doing a lot of work, moms at home are the only support to encourage them to be successful. For instance, In school students doing a lot of work and the understand the lessons from their teachers. But some times children need some help from their parents, if mom and dad are working all the time and no one can help them at home children will struggle in their education. Therefore from an educational perspective it is better to spend more time at home rather than working more hours to make more money.
Socially, working to many hours will affect the family relationship negatively. Children need a lot of attention. Children need their parent while they are young, they need their parent love and care. For example, parents are the only people who can pass on values to their children. Day care or baby sitting will not take the place of parents love and attention. If parents are working for longer hours to gain more money, they will miss the beauty of social life with their children. Also, they will not be building memories with their children. Therefore from a social perspective staying at home is more valuable in building the relationship than working long hours.
Personally, for me staying with my children and building a strong relation with them better than gaining more money. for me and my husband we decided that money is not that important. I decided to stay at home for a while till my children grow up. I want to teach my kids specific values. for example, I want them to learn, reading for 30 minutes every day is important. I want to teach them some personal behavior, such as not to interrupt people while they are talking, not to fight with each others. All these behavior are specifics to me as a mom, no one else will teach them to my kids. that is why I decided to stay home and spend time building up the relationship between me and my children.
In conclusion, for the reasons I stated above, I encourage all the parents to spend more time with their children. That will benefit the kids educational, social and from my personal view it is very important to have a better relationship with your kids.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, so, therefore, while, for example, for instance, in conclusion, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 9.8082437276 153% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 60.0 43.0788530466 139% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 59.0 52.1666666667 113% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2226.0 1977.66487455 113% => OK
No of words: 463.0 407.700716846 114% => OK
Chars per words: 4.80777537797 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.63868890866 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.60477131971 2.67179642975 97% => OK
Unique words: 184.0 212.727598566 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.397408207343 0.524837075471 76% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 671.4 618.680645161 109% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 28.0 20.6003584229 136% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 31.415805037 48.9658058833 64% => OK
Chars per sentence: 79.5 100.406767564 79% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.5357142857 20.6045352989 80% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.07142857143 5.45110844103 56% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 13.0 5.5376344086 235% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 18.0 11.8709677419 152% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.222674015554 0.236089414692 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0717793376091 0.076458572812 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0906137555107 0.0737576698707 123% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.14679930786 0.150856017488 97% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.046824241207 0.0645574589148 73% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.5 11.7677419355 81% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 63.7 58.1214874552 110% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 10.1575268817 83% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.32 10.9000537634 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.75 8.01818996416 84% => OK
difficult_words: 68.0 86.8835125448 78% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 7.0 10.247311828 68% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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