Many companies sell products or services but at the same time cause environmental damage. Someone said it can be stop by ask them to pay penalty, such as a higher tax when they cause the environmental damage. Others said there are better ways to stop them from harming environment. What do you think is the best way to prevent the environment from deteriorating?
In this world of rapid development, the advanced technology brings prosperity and convenience in many aspect of people's life. However, the technology, to be precisely, those companies offering products or services, also caused severe environmental problems. To solve those problems, some people suggest that those companies should pay penalty. From my persepctive, the penalty is not the best way to address those problems without several additional methods. It overlooks the greedy of businessman and ignores the fact that penalty could be effective only if it was used to ameliorate the environments.
First, profits of products and service can be overwhelming compared to the money paid for the penalty. Take the example of a paper factory. The paper factory need wood as material to make papers, and millions of trees are logged annually to make papers, which could cause the decline of wild animal habitats as well as the soil erosion. To make things worse, the paper production process involves several toxic chemical matters, which are disposed into water after being used. To be short, a paper factory could make series of pollution. However, this behavior would not stop because there are still profits after the payment of the penalty. In this sense, the penalty cannot help to improve the environmental situation.
Moreover, there is no guarantee that the fine would be used to compensate the damage caused by those companies. For example, in the case that the government decides to fine those companies with extra taxes, the taxes could be distributed to many asepct such as the public welfare, the fund of research and so on. As a result, the rest bulget are insufficient to compensate the damage caused by those companies. the chinese government published a policy to ask to those polluting companies for extra tax years ago. But the situation have not been better, the haze is still around Beijing, the national capital and the air quality in most of cities has not improved. One possible reason is that the government used those find on the facility constructions. The construction process, in return, resulted the severe air pollutions by putting the soil praticles into the air. In a sentence, improving environment needs more fund.
It is true that publishing laws enforcing those companies to pay penalty could be effective. However, it should be combined with other methods. For instance, the government could request every paper factory to utilize a machine to clear their wastewater.
In a nutshell, it is not sufficient to only ask penalty from those polluting companies. However, this approach could work with other means of combined enforcement.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible agreement error. The noun aspect seems to be countable; consider using: 'many aspects'.
Suggestion: many aspects
...gy brings prosperity and convenience in many aspect of peoples life. However, the technolog...
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Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: The
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Line 5, column 633, Rule ID: MOST_SOME_OF_NNS[1]
Message: After 'most of', you should use 'the' ('most of the cities') or simply say ''most cities''.
Suggestion: most of the cities; most cities
...national capital and the air quality in most of cities has not improved. One possible reason i...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...lear their wastewater. In a nutshell, it is not sufficient to only ask penalty...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, look, moreover, so, still, well, for example, for instance, such as, as a result, as well as, it is true
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 15.1003584229 139% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 9.8082437276 143% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 28.0 43.0788530466 65% => OK
Preposition: 56.0 52.1666666667 107% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 8.0752688172 198% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2252.0 1977.66487455 114% => OK
No of words: 432.0 407.700716846 106% => OK
Chars per words: 5.21296296296 4.8611393121 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.55901411391 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.76328006819 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Unique words: 229.0 212.727598566 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.530092592593 0.524837075471 101% => OK
syllable_count: 714.6 618.680645161 116% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 15.0 3.08781362007 486% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 11.0 4.94265232975 223% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.6003584229 121% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 39.2828512203 48.9658058833 80% => OK
Chars per sentence: 90.08 100.406767564 90% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.28 20.6045352989 84% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.4 5.45110844103 99% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 12.0 3.85842293907 311% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.163624170995 0.236089414692 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0446650411318 0.076458572812 58% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0396714731557 0.0737576698707 54% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0848169498741 0.150856017488 56% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0302269029453 0.0645574589148 47% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.7 11.7677419355 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 45.76 58.1214874552 79% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.64 10.9000537634 116% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.46 8.01818996416 106% => OK
difficult_words: 109.0 86.8835125448 125% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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