Many people believe that it is very important to make large amount of money, while others are satisfied to earn a comfortable living. Analyze each view point and take a stand. Give specific reasons for your position.

Nowadays, people are in a rush to make money to be comfortable in their old ages. Indeed, they are right to think in that way. Today's world is getting tougher to survive. Additionally, population is increasing steadily and making money is getting harder. Some of the people believe that it is very important to make large amounts money in their young ages. Contrary, some of them agreed that earning a comfortable living is more important. Personally I agree that earning a comfortable life is more important. I believe that having happy family members with good health is essential features of life. The reasons and examples chiefly as follows;

Firstly, making big amounts of money does not assure people a happy life. For example, there are many wealthy people with unpleasant psychology. In magazines, you can read many stories about divorced wealthy people. To put in other words, pursuing big amount of money would not guarantee people a comfortable life. People would face with disturbed family life.

Second reason is that, there are other things more important then making large amount of money in life like a good health condition. For instance, my brother got cancer 10 years ago. I can clearly remember that we were so stressful and so upset during the treatment. Hopefully my brother got healthy again. Most probably, during the treatment process, we had an agreement about that having a healthy body is the most essential thing in life. There was nothing to think about except the illness.

Moreover, from the point of view, becoming fully focused to earn big amount of money means that skipping many entertainment. Having fun and enjoy does not need much money. I prefer to go for a camping with my friends instead of going a luxury hotel.

As the aforementioned examples and reasons show that I strongly believe that earning a comfortable living is more important with happy family members in life.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Simply use 'some'.
Suggestion: Some
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Line 5, column 62, Rule ID: LESS_MORE_THEN[1]
Message: Did you mean 'than'?
Suggestion: than
..., there are other things more important then making large amount of money in life li...
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Line 7, column 106, Rule ID: MANY_NN_U[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun entertainment seems to be uncountable; consider using: 'much entertainment', 'a good deal of entertainment'.
Suggestion: much entertainment; a good deal of entertainment
...big amount of money means that skipping many entertainment. Having fun and enjoy does not need muc...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, firstly, if, moreover, second, so, then, for example, for instance, in other words

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 13.8261648746 36% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 43.0788530466 63% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 52.1666666667 77% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1608.0 1977.66487455 81% => OK
No of words: 321.0 407.700716846 79% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.00934579439 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.23278547379 4.48103885553 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.57371028429 2.67179642975 96% => OK
Unique words: 165.0 212.727598566 78% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.514018691589 0.524837075471 98% => OK
syllable_count: 499.5 618.680645161 81% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.994623655914 0% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 13.0 20.1344086022 65% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 32.9016406644 48.9658058833 67% => OK
Chars per sentence: 69.9130434783 100.406767564 70% => OK
Words per sentence: 13.9565217391 20.6045352989 68% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.86956521739 5.45110844103 71% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.85842293907 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.290479407578 0.236089414692 123% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0789935087571 0.076458572812 103% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0790422519248 0.0737576698707 107% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.158740439575 0.150856017488 105% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0469635212867 0.0645574589148 73% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.1 11.7677419355 77% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 58.28 58.1214874552 100% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 10.1575268817 83% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.19 10.9000537634 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.43 8.01818996416 93% => OK
difficult_words: 64.0 86.8835125448 74% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.0 10.002688172 60% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 7.2 10.0537634409 72% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200

Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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