Modern agriculture methods damage the environment but providing food for growing population around the world is more important than protecting the environment

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Modern agriculture methods damage the environment, but providing food for growing population around the world is more important than protecting the environment.

Nowadays, people tend to have different points of view on the question whether we should protect the environment or improve the modern agriculture. The most often heard contention about this topic is we should use modern agriculture methods despite damaging the environment. However, I think this view is over generalized. In fact, this issue can be analyzed from two different perspectives.

Indisputably, there is no justification for us to ignore the fact that agriculture is more important than the environment, especially when it comes to underdeveloped countries. It is widely believed that in some Africa countries a lot of people do not have food to eat. Thus, using modern agriculture methods ensures the basic food applies. I can think of no better illustration than the example of my friend Lucy, a volunteer who worked in Congo in 2016. When she arrived in Congo, she was surprised by the view she saw, since the children there were so skinny. She once taught in the local primary school, where the children only eating one meal for a day, and sometimes finding some grasses to eat. However, with the modern agriculture methods they could grow maize in very harsh conditions, so they can at least eat three meals a day. How could they care about the environment if they cannot even survive. Thus, recalling the experience of Lucy, I can conclude that, in underdeveloped countries, modern agriculture methods is more important.

However compelling the argument above is, it cannot support us to arrive at the verdict because it only focuses on the underdeveloped countries; In order to make a more dependable conclusion, we must consider other relevant situations in which environment is more essential than the agriculture, when it comes to developing or developed counties. It is universally accepted that for people live in the developing or developed countries the most urgent problem is the environment. In this case, protecting the environment is more significant than using modern agriculture methods for support the populations, since people there do not suffer from insufficient food issues. My grandmother’s experience is the best example to prove my point of view. My grandmother, who lives in a small city called Chongqing in China, once she took a trip to an rural area to breath some fresh air, but when she arrived, she found out that there are only lands, which were left because the using of modern agriculture method. Vegetations like flowers, grasser, and trees cannot grow up here, and the river was polluted too, with a smelt smell. She was so disappointed and even got sick because of the air pollution. As a result, it is more vital for developing countries to protect the environment for providing a good living area for the citizens instead of using modern agriculture methods.

To sum up, from what has been discussed, we can easily draw a conclusion that it is irrational to take it for granted that agriculture is more important than protecting the environment. Therefore, only in a case-by-case way can we fully explore this issue’s complexity.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Can you shorten this phrase to just 'whether', or rephrase the sentence to avoid "the question"?
Suggestion: whether
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Suggestion: a
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Message: Consider replacing "in a case-by-case way" with adverb for "case-by-case"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...ecting the environment. Therefore, only in a case-by-case way can we fully explore this issue’s compl...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, if, so, therefore, thus, at least, i think, in fact, as a result, to sum up

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 15.1003584229 152% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 9.8082437276 143% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.0286738351 145% => OK
Pronoun: 47.0 43.0788530466 109% => OK
Preposition: 60.0 52.1666666667 115% => OK
Nominalization: 17.0 8.0752688172 211% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2591.0 1977.66487455 131% => OK
No of words: 509.0 407.700716846 125% => OK
Chars per words: 5.09037328094 4.8611393121 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.74984508646 4.48103885553 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.99442448895 2.67179642975 112% => OK
Unique words: 259.0 212.727598566 122% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.50884086444 0.524837075471 97% => OK
syllable_count: 824.4 618.680645161 133% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 16.0 9.59856630824 167% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 10.0 4.94265232975 202% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 67.0437602205 48.9658058833 137% => OK
Chars per sentence: 112.652173913 100.406767564 112% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.1304347826 20.6045352989 107% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.86956521739 5.45110844103 71% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.332838234591 0.236089414692 141% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0900951893865 0.076458572812 118% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0945635293796 0.0737576698707 128% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.189343643222 0.150856017488 126% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0606934970372 0.0645574589148 94% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.6 11.7677419355 116% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 58.1214874552 85% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.1575268817 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.24 10.9000537634 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.11 8.01818996416 101% => OK
difficult_words: 109.0 86.8835125448 125% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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