Nowadays, it is commonly accepted that take part-time job has a lot of social and psychological benefits for teenage children. Thus, from the past to present, parents always encourage their teenage children to had had a part-time job. Contrary to this popular belief, there are still those who argue that teenagers should not waste their time for any job rather than study for school courses, because the most important thing that determines the success of them in the future would be good grades at school. However, I, to a great extent, agree with this idea that one of the best ways that parents can help their children prepare for adult life is to encourage them to take a part-time job.
First and foremost, a part-time job has a positive effect on the socialization process of teenagers. For example, when I was 16 years old, I was working in a veterinary clinic. In this clinic I was working with five other people, it was a valuable experience to me because I learn team working and I found out that how a respectful communication would be beneficial for the progress of group aims. In addition, I practiced to explain my ideas about different issues and it was increased my self-confidence and help me to be involved in discussions at school.
Another significant fact that should be taken into consideration is that through a part-time job children practice financial independence. Unfortunately, today a lot of young people are still dependent on their parents for financial support. They did not learn to be responsible for own life. However, a part-time job would be a good opportunity for children to understand how making money is important and enjoyable for everyone. For instance, when I got my first salary from veterinary clinic it was one of suites time of my life.
Finally, yet importantly, a job experience can power person resumes for getting future job positions. It is a very positive factor in interviewers point of view if you had had some job experience during the teenage period of life. It shows that the applicant is a serious employee with appropriate social skills.
On the basis of reasons that were mentioned above, I am convinced that parents by motivate their teenage children to take part-time job help them to be a more successful person in their future life. Because of a part-time job can improve social skills, responsibility, financial independence and provide them with powerful CV.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: had
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Suggestion: to team
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Suggestion: practiced explaining
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Suggestion:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
finally, first, however, if, so, still, thus, for example, for instance, in addition, to a great extent
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 15.1003584229 146% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 47.0 43.0788530466 109% => OK
Preposition: 51.0 52.1666666667 98% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.0752688172 136% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2030.0 1977.66487455 103% => OK
No of words: 410.0 407.700716846 101% => OK
Chars per words: 4.9512195122 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.49982852243 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.9061914665 2.67179642975 109% => OK
Unique words: 205.0 212.727598566 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.5 0.524837075471 95% => OK
syllable_count: 641.7 618.680645161 104% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 53.860932038 48.9658058833 110% => OK
Chars per sentence: 112.777777778 100.406767564 112% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.7777777778 20.6045352989 111% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.72222222222 5.45110844103 105% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.506394063411 0.236089414692 214% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.164001310195 0.076458572812 214% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.166241473916 0.0737576698707 225% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.284114710303 0.150856017488 188% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.181607373697 0.0645574589148 281% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.3 11.7677419355 113% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 58.1214874552 85% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.1575268817 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.73 10.9000537634 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.04 8.01818996416 100% => OK
difficult_words: 86.0 86.8835125448 99% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 10.002688172 130% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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