In order to get a higher promotion and salary, many people chose to improve their job performance in two ways. Which one do you prefer? Why?
1 To do additional work and assignments
2 To actively participate in the group work.
General wisdom believes that a higher promotion and salary are the course of pleasure. In order to do so, some may dwell on themselves while some might focus on improving social life and actively involve themselves in group works. I believe that doing additional work and assignments leads to higher promotion and salary.
Off the top of my head is that working all by oneself is the best way to achieve efficiency. That is to say, dealing with a task individually helps avoid wasting time on communicating with others. In this case, one will be prominent among his or her colleagues. Being a college student, the once unpleasant memory about the group work offered a peek into the essence of it. When I was a freshman, there was an environmental science course of which the final project was to do a group research on one type of American crops. There were six people in the group with me being the leader. Starting from the very beginning, we spent the whole week just deciding which crop to study. After choosing maize as our primary subject, here came the issue about how to divide the huge research into six small pieces. Even though having set up everyone's job and trivial details like the font style, the font size, and the format of the paper, the final results of every one were still of great differences. I had to spend my own time doing jobs which could totally be avoided if the group member were on the same page. As one can imagine, the work of our group was anything but ideal. Let alone that was during the final's period. This group work exerted a negative impact on my other courses as well.
In addition, doing work and assignments alone enables oneself to make self-improvements. After all, one has to cope with everything himself which in turn benefits him with an accumulation of more knowledge and experiences. In sharp contrast with that environmental science course, I did an excellent job in my communication's final project in my sophomore year. Having learned a lesson from the previous setback, I chose to finish that project all by myself. To be honest, there were myriad of moments that I wished there could be someone helping me with those technical problems. To name some, editing video clips, building models and then running software. I had to watch tutorials of Final Cut Pro on Youtube and tried to practice several experimental clips so that I can confident enough to edit my video. As for the data analyzing task, I took the advantage of our on-campus computer lab. I spent all the spare time stayed until the close hour in the lab learning about Python and building models for my own data. Of course, that was time-consuming. Yet, after surmounted those obstacles and received the highest score in my class, now I am proficient in these skills and even able to help my friends who major in media or computer science.
My point is thus quite clear. Doing additional work and assignments helps people to get higher promotion and salary.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 477, Rule ID: A_UNCOUNTABLE[3]
Message: Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply 'group research'.
Suggestion: group research
...se of which the final project was to do a group research on one type of American crops. There we...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, may, so, still, then, thus, well, while, after all, as for, as to, in addition, of course, that is to say
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 15.1003584229 139% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 13.8261648746 130% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.0286738351 145% => OK
Pronoun: 52.0 43.0788530466 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 78.0 52.1666666667 150% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2464.0 1977.66487455 125% => OK
No of words: 521.0 407.700716846 128% => OK
Chars per words: 4.72936660269 4.8611393121 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.77759609229 4.48103885553 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.59443030934 2.67179642975 97% => OK
Unique words: 290.0 212.727598566 136% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.556621880998 0.524837075471 106% => OK
syllable_count: 775.8 618.680645161 125% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.51792114695 199% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 11.0 4.94265232975 223% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 29.0 20.6003584229 141% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 39.786140549 48.9658058833 81% => OK
Chars per sentence: 84.9655172414 100.406767564 85% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.9655172414 20.6045352989 87% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.93103448276 5.45110844103 72% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.23871771496 0.236089414692 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0652851649223 0.076458572812 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0943899463109 0.0737576698707 128% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.198024573391 0.150856017488 131% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0974555426666 0.0645574589148 151% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.8 11.7677419355 83% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 58.1214874552 108% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.1575268817 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.86 10.9000537634 90% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.97 8.01818996416 99% => OK
difficult_words: 115.0 86.8835125448 132% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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