parents should spend their free time having fun with their kids or doing something related to schoolwork
In the last three decades, the world has become very competitive and expensive. Having said that, parents today do not have enough time to spend with their children. Some people believe that parents should spend their spare time playing and having fun with their kids; however, others claim that the best way to use this free time is by doing something related to schoolwork. Form a personal perspective, the former point of view carries more weight given that it has a positive impact on children's physical fitness and mental well-being. Below I will strive to explain my supporting points in more detail.
The first and foremost point, provided that parents spend their free time playing exercise with their kids, they could encourage them to live healthily. A vivid example could be given to shed light on that is parents in developed countries, such as Canada and the US are accustomed to playing exercise and share that with their kids. Thus, they could not only enhance their kids' physical fitness, but also reduce the risk of some diseases, such as juvenile diabetes and obesity. Furthermore, playing sports with kids is a vital way to keep them energized and refreshed, which could help them to sock up more information and boost their academic performance. Consequently, playing sports with kids is integral.
Next, coupled with proper health, mental well-being is another benefit of having fun with kids. Provided that parents spend leisure time with their kids, they could have a profounded relationship with them. For instance, teenagers in Egypt are very attached to their parents given that they usually spend a pleasant time with them, either watching movies, playing games or even having a valuable conversation. To put it in other words, kids feel more loved and secure, which is very significant for their mental well being. Moreover, although schools could teach kids academic subjects, they could not teach them good morals, so it is the parents' responsibility. Therefore, spending a pleasant time with kids is imperative.
Taking everything into consederation; without a doubt, the best way for parents to spend their spare time is by playing with their kids. It is suggested that parents compromise and ensure to spend a pleasant time with their kids, yet a quality one.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 640, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'parents'' or 'parent's'?
Suggestion: parents'; parent's
...ot teach them good morals, so it is the parents responsibility. Therefore, spending a p...
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Line 7, column 200, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...parents compromise and ensure to spend a pleasant time with their kids, yet a qua...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, furthermore, however, if, moreover, so, therefore, thus, well, for instance, such as, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 43.0 43.0788530466 100% => OK
Preposition: 43.0 52.1666666667 82% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1922.0 1977.66487455 97% => OK
No of words: 377.0 407.700716846 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.09814323607 4.8611393121 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.4064143971 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.55648155532 2.67179642975 96% => OK
Unique words: 196.0 212.727598566 92% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.519893899204 0.524837075471 99% => OK
syllable_count: 562.5 618.680645161 91% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 46.9974060225 48.9658058833 96% => OK
Chars per sentence: 106.777777778 100.406767564 106% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.9444444444 20.6045352989 102% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.33333333333 5.45110844103 135% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.537339296471 0.236089414692 228% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.187570118908 0.076458572812 245% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.153707217609 0.0737576698707 208% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.356419435594 0.150856017488 236% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0745865373046 0.0645574589148 116% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.1 11.7677419355 111% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 58.1214874552 103% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.3 10.9000537634 113% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.15 8.01818996416 102% => OK
difficult_words: 84.0 86.8835125448 97% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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