Traveling is a convenient way to explore new places, find new friends, or even relax and please your soul. People have different views about their destinations; some don’t like to go much far while others prefer going abroad. I strongly believe we have to travel inside our borders. I feel this way for two reasons, which I will explore in the following essay.
First, with making local trips, I can help my compatriots. When we travel to a new place, we spend a lot of money buying hand-crafts, eating food, and visiting special places. As a result, a lot of industries and occupations will be shaped around tourism in that area. So, traveling in our own country is kind of demonstrating our support for these professions. My personal experience is a compelling example of this. I live in Neyshabur, which is a small city in Iran, having plenty of tourist sites, traditional foods, valuable flowers like saffron, and awesome nature. It’s clear that lots of people are having jobs to give various services to visitors with high qualities. Therefore, with supporting them we can make them more eager and give them the motivation to excel and improve the quality of their products and even produce more job opportunities for other people.
Secondly, you won’t encounter language problems with intra-country travels. It is important to understand other people, specially the ones you have direct interactions with; like tour-guides and sellers. Consequently, excessive need to use dictionaries and online guides might become overwhelming in a short time. For example, When I traveled to China a few years ago, I experienced a lot of language difficulties. One of them was that nobody spoke English and I had to communicate with others using gestures, facial motions, and sounds. Once, I ran out of Chinese cash and wanted to exchange my money but the nearest agency was closed so I had to ask others to help me. Trying to mime what I wanted was really difficult so I was wandering in the streets to find a person who can speak English. After about half an hour, I ran into a person who could, and he helped me to find what I was seeking for. After this trip, I’ve never traveled outside of the country again.
In conclusion, I’m of the opinion that traveling inside the country is better because we can support our people and local industries and also we would not suffer from language problems.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, if, really, second, secondly, so, therefore, while, for example, i feel, in conclusion, kind of, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 13.8261648746 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 48.0 43.0788530466 111% => OK
Preposition: 56.0 52.1666666667 107% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.0752688172 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2018.0 1977.66487455 102% => OK
No of words: 411.0 407.700716846 101% => OK
Chars per words: 4.9099756691 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.50256981431 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.7827551738 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Unique words: 246.0 212.727598566 116% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.598540145985 0.524837075471 114% => OK
syllable_count: 625.5 618.680645161 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 36.940900981 48.9658058833 75% => OK
Chars per sentence: 91.7272727273 100.406767564 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.6818181818 20.6045352989 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.36363636364 5.45110844103 117% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.16916968322 0.236089414692 72% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0444127259599 0.076458572812 58% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0556245067436 0.0737576698707 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.115744182502 0.150856017488 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.046434996407 0.0645574589148 72% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.0 11.7677419355 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 58.1214874552 106% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.2 10.9000537634 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.6 8.01818996416 107% => OK
difficult_words: 106.0 86.8835125448 122% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.0 10.002688172 60% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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