people now can live longer which of the following do you think is the main reason for this phenomenon
technological improvement
improve people diet
improvement in the education
Since the beginning of the current century, people have been healthier than they were in the past. Even though some people believe that life in the past was less stressful, which helped people to be more energized, there is a substantial body of evidence that casts doubts on this belief. From a personal perspective, nowadays, people have a longer lifespan because of technological improvements, which play a vital role in the development of medical equipment and solving various environmental problems. Below I will strive to explain my supporting points in more detail.
The first and foremost point, health care system in the past was rudimentary given that technology was primitive. To put it in other words, lots of vaccines and cures did not exist in the past. On the other hand, improvement in technology helps scientists doing various research to promote health services. A vivid example that could be given to shed light on what was elaborated above is, in 2001, doctor Magdy Yacoub, who is a famous cardiologist, used technology to manufacture the first artificial heart. This approach saved many people’s lives, till now more than fifteen million persons from more than twenty countries have been treated. Furthermore, technology helped surgeons to improve the procedures of liver and kidney transplantation, which have increased the rate of success of these surgeries. Consequently, technology is imperative to increase people’s longevity.
Next, coupled with medical technological improvements, finding a solution to an abundance of environmental problems is another reason why technology helps people to live longer. Nowadays, nature encounters many problems, such as air pollution, water contamination and global warming. In the last three decades, technology has helped people to find a solution to all these problems, so people can live healthier. For instance, last month, I read an article about the earth and it stated that, two years ago, a new computer program was invented to reduce global warming by eighty percent, so it could save the world from devasting consequences. In addition to that, this program could also reduces the amount of carbon dioxide in the air, so people could breathe fresh air, which reduce the risk of many diseases, such as asthma and COPD. As a result, technology is significant for people to live longer.
Taking everything into consideration, without a doubt, technology is one of the most integral reasons that increases people’s lifespan. It is suggested that advocates for education in order to continue to progress and develop.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 689, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'could' requires the base form of the verb: 'reduce'
Suggestion: reduce
...dition to that, this program could also reduces the amount of carbon dioxide in the air...
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Line 7, column 234, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...er to continue to progress and develop.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, consequently, first, furthermore, if, so, for instance, in addition, such as, as a result, in other words, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 21.0 43.0788530466 49% => OK
Preposition: 60.0 52.1666666667 115% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 8.0752688172 173% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2199.0 1977.66487455 111% => OK
No of words: 410.0 407.700716846 101% => OK
Chars per words: 5.36341463415 4.8611393121 110% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.49982852243 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.00293431749 2.67179642975 112% => OK
Unique words: 240.0 212.727598566 113% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.585365853659 0.524837075471 112% => OK
syllable_count: 678.6 618.680645161 110% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 9.59856630824 42% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 10.0 4.94265232975 202% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 51.4383152621 48.9658058833 105% => OK
Chars per sentence: 115.736842105 100.406767564 115% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.5789473684 20.6045352989 105% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.84210526316 5.45110844103 126% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.237706576676 0.236089414692 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.076392826972 0.076458572812 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0713651140477 0.0737576698707 97% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.145396911751 0.150856017488 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.045586355519 0.0645574589148 71% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.6 11.7677419355 124% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 41.7 58.1214874552 72% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 10.1575268817 125% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.81 10.9000537634 127% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.22 8.01818996416 115% => OK
difficult_words: 118.0 86.8835125448 136% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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