People sometimes buy products that they do not need, just because other people have them
Nowadays, we witness lots of shopping between people since they want to meet their needs such as preparing food or buying warm clothes in the winter and so on. In this way, some people go to shop and buy some things that are not useful for them. As a matter of fact, they only purchase some products because others have them. From my point of view, people do this because they want to be higher than other people and they want to imitate as well. My arguments for these points are explained as follows.
First, most people want to ahead of other people as a result they see the life as a competition that they should compete with each other. For example, if your neighbor buy a new car, your wife’s may tell you to buy a new car even more expensive than your neighbors car because your wife think that if she does not have a car like your neighbor's car, she is poor in comparison with your neighbor. In addition, some people believe that if they do not have some special things like others, they do not have credit between people. To give an example, some people try to buy luxury apartment even though they have an apartment. They do this because they think that by living in the luxury apartments they can earn respect in the society.
Second, most people like to imitate each other. Scientists believe that imitating is an inherent habit between people therefore they like to have some products that others have too. For instance, if your classmate buys new shoes, you will certainly go to purchase it even with the same color. Furthermore, some people are not able to rely on their manners. In other words, they think they cannot buy suitable goods hence they see other people when they want to shop new commodities. To give an instance, last week I went to the electronic stores in order to buy a new cell phone but I could not make a decision that which model is better for me thus I saw the other customers to figure out what they want to buy so I bought the model that another customer wants to buy.
All in all, from what I have discussed, these days, people try to buy plenty of goods so as to provide their demands. Some persons would rather to buy some goods that are not suitable for them and actually they do not need it at all. They just prepare it because other people have them. In my opinion, people do this behavior because not only do they want to surpass others in their lives but also they like to mimic others.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 7, column 87, Rule ID: SO_AS_TO[1]
Message: Use simply 'to'
Suggestion: to
...days, people try to buy plenty of goods so as to provide their demands. Some persons wou...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, first, furthermore, hence, if, may, second, so, therefore, thus, well, as to, for example, for instance, in addition, such as, as a matter of fact, as a result, in my opinion, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 15.1003584229 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 13.8261648746 51% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 70.0 43.0788530466 162% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 59.0 52.1666666667 113% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1998.0 1977.66487455 101% => OK
No of words: 452.0 407.700716846 111% => OK
Chars per words: 4.4203539823 4.8611393121 91% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.61088837703 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.15518977798 2.67179642975 81% => OK
Unique words: 203.0 212.727598566 95% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.449115044248 0.524837075471 86% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 618.3 618.680645161 100% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.994623655914 0% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 59.713147631 48.9658058833 122% => OK
Chars per sentence: 99.9 100.406767564 99% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.6 20.6045352989 110% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.55 5.45110844103 194% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.526643250282 0.236089414692 223% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.204878047018 0.076458572812 268% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.127629550537 0.0737576698707 173% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.38600370026 0.150856017488 256% => Maybe some contents are duplicated.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0691951652799 0.0645574589148 107% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.7 11.7677419355 91% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 66.07 58.1214874552 114% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.65 10.9000537634 79% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.75 8.01818996416 84% => OK
difficult_words: 58.0 86.8835125448 67% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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