Playing computer is a wast of time. Children should not be allowed to play them.
Agree or disagree?
Technology has exponentially been uplited the standard of living, and this advancing frontier is not curtail with computer and virtual games because human life without technology is unimiginative. while some people believe that playing computer games has negative effect on the children, there are others holding the idea spending time with computer games is exciting leisure time for any kids. As far as from my perspective, playing computer games is unsuitable way of life for child and should not allowed to play in that not only do children's healthy lifestyle is threatened by playing computer games, but also offspring has not enough time for experiencing social life.
The first reason, which should be maintained here is that children are at stack of unhealthy events via spending time with computer games. In a matter of fact, children should spend long time for enjoying from computer games. It would be provide sedentary lifestyle that are dangerous for youngers owing to lack of activity work. For example, in these days at Iran, heart attacks and Diabetes rating among young people are increased. Furthermore, children encounter with wide range of physical disorders thereby playing virtual games since they pay clos attention to screen and never move for several hours. That hurts to their body like vision or concentration disorders. Scientistics argued that radiation from screen impact on brain and eye directly, and then kisd cannot treatment their medical problem forever.
Another factor, which deserves to be considered is that children have no enough chance for participating in public life. In that case, youngers miss any opportunity for practicing their independency in social and financial regards reasoning that they never spend time beside other children for encountering with complicated problem. It is argued that they have not enough time for proving their personal ability to parents for debuting independent lifestyle. Additionally, offspring do not learn crucial and necessary social etteqeets for making prestigious social status. Children cannot share their ideas with others, and it causes they to be social isolation. To illustrate, they should take a part time job during teenager while it depends on amount of participation in society. They make an opportunity for spending time beside their co-worker for making close relationship, and then they earn a hoard of money for starting independent life.
To put everything in a nutshell, playing computer games missing any chance for flourishing talents and enjoying from life: therefore, parents should be mticlouse about children's timing scudual for playing virtual game and other important chores.
not only do children's healthy lifestyle is threatened by playing computer games
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It would be provide sedentary lifestyle that are dangerous
It would provide sedentary lifestyles that are dangerous
playing computer games missing any chance for flourishing talents and enjoying from life:
playing computer games is missing any chance for flourishing talents and enjoying from life:
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Sentence: Scientistics argued that radiation from screen impact on brain and eye directly, and then kisd cannot treatment their medical problem forever.
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Sentence: Children cannot share their ideas with others, and it causes they to be social isolation.
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Sentence: Technology has exponentially been uplited the standard of living, and this advancing frontier is not curtail with computer and virtual games because human life without technology is unimiginative. while some people believe that playing computer games has negative effect on the children, there are others holding the idea spending time with computer games is exciting leisure time for any kids.
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Sentence: It would be provide sedentary lifestyle that are dangerous for youngers owing to lack of activity work.
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Sentence: Furthermore, children encounter with wide range of physical disorders thereby playing virtual games since they pay clos attention to screen and never move for several hours.
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Sentence: Scientistics argued that radiation from screen impact on brain and eye directly, and then kisd cannot treatment their medical problem forever.
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Sentence: In that case, youngers miss any opportunity for practicing their independency in social and financial regards reasoning that they never spend time beside other children for encountering with complicated problem.
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Sentence: Additionally, offspring do not learn crucial and necessary social etteqeets for making prestigious social status.
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Sentence: To put everything in a nutshell, playing computer games missing any chance for flourishing talents and enjoying from life: therefore, parents should be mticlouse about children's timing scudual for playing virtual game and other important chores.
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