Contemporary parents use different methods to encourage their kids to get better grades and study harder at school. One of which is to give them money every time they ace a course. There has been no shortage of debates among individuals on whether this helps children. I vehemently cling to the notion that this method could be a great way to stimulate them. In the following paragraphs, I will delve into two of my most prominent reasons for advocating this viewpoint.
First and foremost, a plethora of students is not eager towards their school, mostly because education shows its benefits in the long run. Therefore, by giving youth money for their achievement, they’re going to approach their studies in a deep and meaningful fashion with enthusiasm and diligence. This motivation helps them to emphasize their education over other things. Moreover, this money makes their lives more fulfilling and enables them to pursue their passions and desires. My personal experience is a compelling illustration of this. When I was in high school, I used to hate math, but my mother offered me that if I get an A in my final exam, she would give me money to buy a video game. This was a great incitement for me, and I studied very hard and managed to get a full mark on that test.
Furthermore, another equally compelling reason for corroborating my stance lies in the fact that by doing this, parents can enhance their relationship with their children. Parents play a decisive role in their children’s growth, and it’s necessary for them to create a bond with them. Additionally, due to the huge age gap between parents and children in this hectic modern era, juveniles’ relationships with their parents are weaker than ever before. Therefore, this technique could compensate and fulfill this flaw. By having a good relationship with their parents, kids are going to show more respect to them and try their best to make them proud. Besides, a lot of youngsters’ mental problems have roots in their childhood. Consequently, by having a robust bond with their parents, they’re less likely to be traumatized in the future and be diagnosed with any mental problems.
To put it all in a nutshell, having all the aforementioned reasons and examples into account, I strongly believe that giving adolescents money for their grades can motivate them to persevere, on the ground that this could be a great goal for them, as well as parents can strengthen their relationship with their kid.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: an; A
... but my mother offered me that if I get an A in my final exam, she would give me mon...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, but, consequently, first, furthermore, if, moreover, so, then, therefore, thus, well, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 68.0 43.0788530466 158% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 58.0 52.1666666667 111% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2078.0 1977.66487455 105% => OK
No of words: 419.0 407.700716846 103% => OK
Chars per words: 4.95942720764 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.52432199235 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.81446690548 2.67179642975 105% => OK
Unique words: 236.0 212.727598566 111% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.563245823389 0.524837075471 107% => OK
syllable_count: 624.6 618.680645161 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 56.4711209381 48.9658058833 115% => OK
Chars per sentence: 103.9 100.406767564 103% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.95 20.6045352989 102% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.25 5.45110844103 96% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.301369263529 0.236089414692 128% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0917782627912 0.076458572812 120% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.04842884407 0.0737576698707 66% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.192550379699 0.150856017488 128% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.023966569018 0.0645574589148 37% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.4 11.7677419355 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 58.1214874552 103% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.49 10.9000537634 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.17 8.01818996416 102% => OK
difficult_words: 94.0 86.8835125448 108% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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