Childhood is the most critical period of a person's life. It is the time for a person to learn many things, get social with people, prepare himself for future and get proper education. Sometimes, parents tend to celebrate their kids success in school by offering them money. Many people might support the idea saying that it would motivate a kid to achieve good result and consequently it would help them to make a prosperous life. However, I personally strongly hate this idea and some reasons will be provided in the following paragraphs to verify my judgement.
First and foremost, the main reason I disagree with the idea of offering money for good result in school is that this kind of monetary token might make a child greedy. It is a known fact that children always learn from their parents. Therefore if they find that their parents measure every success with money, it would certainly make their mindset likewise and when they grow up they would also consider economical value of every aspect of life. Hence I think it is better to appreciate a child for his success and make the kid feel that his success makes the parents happy. To encourage the kid, parents might arrange a party or plan a tour or even cook special dish and celebrate the success.
Second issue that comes to my mind is that children might take tremendous pressure to achieve good result in order to earn money. As a consequence, it might cause harmful effect on physical and mental health of a child. Moreover, this kind of monetary prizes might lead a child to follow unethical ways to confirm good result in exams. Also, it would create unnecessary competition in learning environment and a child might tend to look for shortcut ways to get higher grade.
Finally, I personally believe that achieving good result in school should not be the only goal of a child. Parents should motivate their kid to engage into another activities like painting, reading books, playing games and other extra-curricular activities. Offering money only for educational success might lead a child unsocial and he would keep himself into home to study day and night. A statistics conducted on children in my city shows that 70% of children nowadays don't participate in any outside activities which is very alarming. In our childhood, most of us manage our time to play, to gossip and other activities which gave us many wonderful experience and made our childhood enjoyable.
To sum up, it is fairly safe to draw the conclusion that parents should encourage their kids achievement in school, but they should not always offer money for that and it would not be wise to engage kids only in study. Let the children play and enjoy their life and teach them humanity.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 44, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'persons'' or 'person's'?
Suggestion: persons'; person's
...ldhood is the most critical period of a persons life. It is the time for a person to le...
^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 235, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Therefore,
...ildren always learn from their parents. Therefore if they find that their parents measure...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 447, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Hence,
...onomical value of every aspect of life. Hence I think it is better to appreciate a ch...
^^^^^
Line 7, column 473, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...ity shows that 70% of children nowadays dont participate in any outside activities w...
^^^^
Line 7, column 639, Rule ID: MANY_NN_U[4]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun experience seems to be uncountable; consider using: 'much wonderful experience', 'a good deal of wonderful experience'.
Suggestion: much wonderful experience; a good deal of wonderful experience
...ssip and other activities which gave us many wonderful experience and made our childhood enjoyable. To...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, finally, first, hence, however, if, likewise, look, moreover, second, so, therefore, i think, kind of, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 20.0 9.8082437276 204% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 20.0 13.8261648746 145% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 55.0 43.0788530466 128% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 56.0 52.1666666667 107% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2266.0 1977.66487455 115% => OK
No of words: 469.0 407.700716846 115% => OK
Chars per words: 4.8315565032 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.65364457471 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.51890799843 2.67179642975 94% => OK
Unique words: 235.0 212.727598566 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.501066098081 0.524837075471 95% => OK
syllable_count: 700.2 618.680645161 113% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 41.3275176949 48.9658058833 84% => OK
Chars per sentence: 107.904761905 100.406767564 107% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.3333333333 20.6045352989 108% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.52380952381 5.45110844103 120% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.287587237672 0.236089414692 122% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0832295016588 0.076458572812 109% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0624074830457 0.0737576698707 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.168899390752 0.150856017488 112% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0525926600781 0.0645574589148 81% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.5 11.7677419355 106% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 58.1214874552 99% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.03 10.9000537634 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.96 8.01818996416 99% => OK
difficult_words: 96.0 86.8835125448 110% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
---------------------
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
---------------------
Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.