Childhood is the most crucial period of a person's life. It is the time for a person to learn many things, get social with people, prepare himself for future and get proper education. Sometimes, parents tend to celebrate their kids success in school by offering them money. Many people might support the idea saying that it would motivate a kid to achieve good result and consequently it would help them to make a prosperous life. However, I personally strongly hate this idea and some reasons will be provided in the following paragraphs to verify my judgement.
First and foremost, the main reason I disagree with the idea of offering money for good result in school is that this kind of monetary token might make a child greedy. It is a known fact that children always learn from their parents. Therefore, if they find that their parents measure every success with money, it would certainly make their mindset likewise and when they grow up they would also consider economical value of every aspect of life. Hence, I think it is better to appreciate a child for his success and make the kid feel that his success makes the parents happy. To encourage the kid, parents might arrange a party or plan a tour or even cook special dish and celebrate the success.
Second issue that comes to my mind is that children might take tremendous pressure to achieve good result in order to earn money. As a consequence, it might cause harmful effect on physical and mental health of a child. Moreover, this kind of monetary prizes might lead a child to follow unethical ways to confirm good result in exams. Also, it would create unnecessary competition in learning environment and a child might tend to look for shortcut ways to get higher grade.
Finally, I personally believe that achieving good result in school should not be the only goal of a child. Parents should motivate their kid to engage into another activities like painting, reading books, playing games and other extra-curricular activities. Offering money only for educational success might lead a child unsocial and he would keep himself into home to study day and night. In our childhood, most of us manage our time to play, to gossip and other activities which gave us much wonderful experience and made our childhood enjoyable.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 43, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'persons'' or 'person's'?
Suggestion: persons'; person's
...ildhood is the most crucial period of a persons life. It is the time for a person to le...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, consequently, finally, first, hence, however, if, likewise, look, moreover, second, so, therefore, i think, kind of
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 15.1003584229 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 17.0 9.8082437276 173% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 45.0 43.0788530466 104% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 52.1666666667 86% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1904.0 1977.66487455 96% => OK
No of words: 392.0 407.700716846 96% => OK
Chars per words: 4.85714285714 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.44960558625 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.52548443607 2.67179642975 95% => OK
Unique words: 206.0 212.727598566 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.525510204082 0.524837075471 100% => OK
syllable_count: 587.7 618.680645161 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 36.4263166297 48.9658058833 74% => OK
Chars per sentence: 105.777777778 100.406767564 105% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.7777777778 20.6045352989 106% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.72222222222 5.45110844103 123% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.264848416849 0.236089414692 112% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0801444281865 0.076458572812 105% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0628512877961 0.0737576698707 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.158675642058 0.150856017488 105% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0597955739923 0.0645574589148 93% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.4 11.7677419355 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 58.1214874552 101% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.91 10.9000537634 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.14 8.01818996416 102% => OK
difficult_words: 86.0 86.8835125448 99% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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